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I was awarded a scholarship at la salle santo antonio school in 2014, where I actively participated in curricular activities. I participated in the Robotics club for a year, developing a sensor to measure the probability of areas at risk of flooding in the city of Porto Alegre. I was a member of the school's drama club for two years, where I worked on sets, and texts for plays, working on two original plays. I carried out scientific research in different areas of knowledge; natural sciences, mathematics and human sciences. I was featured in the young ufrgs hall with the project “Good Readers, good students? ” in the humanities category. I won 2nd place in the multifeira of La salle santo antonio with the projects “Ph corporal e a Saúde” in the category of natural sciences. I discovered my passion for audio visual in 2016, when I worked on my first production, a documentary about the stream deluge in Porto Alegre. Where I interviewed residents and people who were part of its history and are affected by the lack of investment and care with the stream, which was once a river that crossed Porto Alegre and today is an open sewer. I worked on different productions during my high school respectively; documentary, short film and video clip. Exploring different formats and themes within visual audio. I participated in several film festivals, where it receives the awards of: Best short film, Best documentary, Best editing, Best cinematography, Best direction, Best cinematography and screenplay. My main extracurricular activity is kendo, a Japanese martial art. I started to practice kendo in 2014 and during these eight years I was able to learn a lot and evolve emotionally. I participated in seminars and championships, where I was able to test my limits and learn a lot about myself. I was runner-up in the Brazilian championship in 2016, the same year I joined the Brazilian kendo team competing in the Latin American kendo championship in Chile. In 2017 I won first place in the women's individual and team category in the Brazilian kendo championship. In 2018 I won the honor award for merit and fighting spirit. This journey has provided me with self-knowledge, opportunities to travel and be immersed in a different culture, but I mainly highlight being part of a community committed to growing and evolving both in martial skills and as a human being. To be engaged in so many different projects, I had to learn to organize my time and prioritize what was really important to me. I believe that each of these experiences made me a more complete and mature person to face life's challenges.
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was awarded
a scholarship at la
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salle
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santo
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antonio
school in 2014, where I
actively
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participated
in curricular activities. I
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participated
in the Robotics club for a
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year
, developing a sensor to measure the probability of areas at
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risk
of flooding in the city of Porto
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Alegre
.
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I
was a member of the school's drama club for two years, where I worked on sets, and texts for plays, working on two original plays.
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I
carried out scientific research in
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different
areas of knowledge; natural sciences, mathematics and human sciences.
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I
was featured
in the young
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ufrgs
hall with the project “
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Good
Readers,
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good
students? ” in the
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humanities
category. I won 2nd place in the
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multifeira
of La
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salle
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santo
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antonio
with the projects “
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Ph
corporal e a
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Saúde
” in the category of natural sciences.

I discovered my passion for audio visual in 2016, when I worked on my
first
production, a documentary about the stream deluge in Porto
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Alegre
. Where I interviewed residents and
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people
who were part of its history and are
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affected
by the lack of investment and care with the stream, which was once a river that crossed Porto
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Alegre
and
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today
is an open sewer. I worked on
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different
productions during my high school
respectively
; documentary, short film and video clip. Exploring
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different
formats and themes within visual audio. I
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participated
in several film festivals, where it receives the awards of:
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Best
short film,
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Best
documentary,
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Best
editing,
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Best
cinematography,
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Best
direction,
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Best
cinematography and screenplay.

My main extracurricular activity is
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kendo
, a Japanese martial art. I
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started
to practice
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kendo
in 2014 and during these eight years I was able to learn a lot and evolve
emotionally
. I
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participated
in seminars and
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championships
, where I was able to
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test
my limits and learn a lot about myself.
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I
was runner-up in the Brazilian
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championship
in 2016, the same
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year
I
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joined
the Brazilian
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kendo
team competing in the Latin American
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kendo
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championship
in Chile. In
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2017 I
won
first
place in the women's individual and team category in the Brazilian
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kendo
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championship
. In
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2018 I
won the honor award for merit and fighting spirit. This journey has provided me with self-knowledge, opportunities to travel and
be immersed
in a
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different
culture,
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but
I
mainly
highlight being part of a community committed to growing and evolving both in martial
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skills
and as a human being.

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be engaged
in
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so
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many
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different
projects, I had to learn to organize my time and prioritize what was
really
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important
to me. I believe that each of these experiences made me a more complete and mature person to face life's challenges.
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IELTS essay Requirements and scholarships

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
444 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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