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Referencing the information presented by the professor, explain the concept of the sunk cost fallacy. v.1

Referencing the information presented by the professor, explain the concept of the sunk cost fallacy. v. 1
Modern technology is flourishing by leaps and bounds, which brings significant efforts in our daily communications. As the time passed by, communication through letters has been reduced because of vast improvement in telecommunications. I agree with the given statement and the reasons are demystified below. To begin with, in present era technology plays a vital role in everyone’s life. As it is escalated to the distance between the people is reduced. Consequently, the mode of communication with human beings has changed dramatically. Through new advancements of imparting platform such as email, WhatsApp and Facebook, the information can be sent in short span of time across the world but this was not the case when letters were used. For Instance, in early 1990’s, my father used to send letters to share information and it used to take 4 to 5 days to reach the destination, but now my father is using the email and other social media applications instead of letters for faster transmission. Furthermore, modern communication provides various ways to connect with dear ones, who are staying far away using text and voice messages, voice calls and video calls. As a result, people can feel their loved one’s presence around them. Nevertheless, letters do not have the facility to feel the presence except to convey the information. Resultantly, the usage of letters will demolish as the modern technology is taking flight. To recapitulate, the modern technology is driving the world and making humans to have better and faster communication platform to send information within a short period of time.
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technology
is flourishing by leaps and bounds, which brings significant efforts in our daily communications. As the time passed by,
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communication
through
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letters
has been
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reduced
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because
of vast improvement in telecommunications. I
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agree
with the
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given
statement and the reasons
are demystified
below.

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begin
with, in present era
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technology
plays a vital role in everyone’s life.
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As
it
is escalated
to the distance between the
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people
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is
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reduced
.
Consequently
, the mode of
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communication
with human beings has
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changed
dramatically
. Through new advancements of imparting platform such as email, WhatsApp and Facebook, the
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information
can be
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sent
in short span of time across the world
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but
this was not the case when
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letters
were
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used
.
For Instance
, in early
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, my father
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used
to
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send
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letters
to share
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information
and it
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used
to take 4 to 5 days to reach the destination,
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but
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now
my father is using the email and other social media applications
instead
of
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letters
for faster transmission.

Furthermore
,
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modern
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communication
provides various ways to connect with dear ones, who are staying far away using text and voice messages, voice calls and video calls.
As a result
,
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people
can feel their
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loved
one’s presence around them.
Nevertheless
,
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letters
do not have the facility to feel the presence except to convey the
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information
.
Resultantly
, the usage of
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letters
will demolish as the
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modern
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technology
is taking flight.

To recapitulate, the
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modern
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technology
is driving the world and making humans to have better and faster
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communication
platform to
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send
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information
within a short period of time.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Referencing the information presented by the professor, explain the concept of the sunk cost fallacy. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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