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Redesigning the interior space of a company is the objective of this project, including lobby, office rooms, staff lounge and staff's dining room.

Redesigning the interior space of a company is the objective of this project, including lobby, office rooms, staff lounge and staff's dining room. dojM6
Redesigning the interior space of a company is the objective of this project, including lobby, office rooms, staff lounge and staff's dining room. In addition, the designer has to choose the products manufactured by the company. In this project, the whole space was approximetely 4270 square feet. I chose lightings as the main products for this company to produce because of the question from the bottom of my heart. "A lighting can light up a corner; how about a massive of lightings? " I asked myself curiously and developed it as the concept.
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is the objective of this project, including lobby, office rooms, staff lounge and staff's dining room.
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choose the products manufactured by the
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4270 square feet
. I chose
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lightings
as the main products for this
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company
to produce
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of the question from the bottom of my heart.

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A lighting can light up a corner; how about
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a massive of
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lightings
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I asked myself
curiously
and developed it as the concept.

IELTS essay Redesigning the interior space of a company is the objective of this project, including lobby, office rooms, staff lounge and staff's dining room.

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93 words
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