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Many doctors are concerned about the use of computer games by children and young. what mental and physical problems arise and what are the solutions

Many doctors are concerned about the use of computer games by children and young. what mental and physical problems arise and what are the solutions 7aN1Y
Technology is a boon for humans whilst, owing of accessing more and more electronic gadgets are becoming bane nowadays. Many doctors and health care workers are extremely worried about the use of computers to play games by kids and youngsters because that electronic devices lead individuals to the health issues like mentally and physically disorders. This essay will enunciate the impacts of computer games and remedies of this happening. To embark with the major effect is that when juviniles spend their more and more time to play computer games, then it damage their eyes and in a short period of time their eye-sight becomes vastly weak because of this, they are not able to see clearly. These games also indulge humans in depression which is very common disease in these days because many people prefer to do usage of these inventions to play games and feel relax but they never understand the bad impacts of these technology. Secondly, youngers and minors becoming lazy and due to this, they are not fit in health. Sometimes they indulge in bad companies and make fake accounts to hack others accounts or utilize their remunerations in computer games to win levels and other so on. To instance, In India there was a boy named jasdeep, he expand his 60, 000 in Pubg game to win levels and weapons. However, there are many measures to resolve that issues. Firstly, parents should make stringent norms for their kids and play physical games with them which is extremely good for the health. They also make schedules for their childrens which includes all the activities like exercises, playing outdoor games, eat organic and hygeinic meals and also gave electronic gadgets to access for a short period of time to communicate and interact with their friends and relatives. Furthermore, tutors provide awareness in classrooms, through small functions and lectures to new generations to use less time to play those games and in spite of this, they do physical exercises like yoga, walk, run to sharp their brain, enhance their stamina and get rid from mental and physical diseases.
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doctors and
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of computers to
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by kids and youngsters
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that electronic devices lead individuals to the
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issues like mentally and
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disorders. This essay will enunciate the impacts of computer
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games
and remedies of this happening.

To embark with the major effect is that when
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juviniles
spend their more and more
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time
to
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play
computer
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games
, then it
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damage
their eyes and in a short period of
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time
their eye-sight becomes
vastly
weak
because of this
, they are not able to
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see
clearly
. These
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games
also
indulge humans in depression which is
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very
common disease in these days
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because
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many
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people
prefer to do usage of these inventions to
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play
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games
and feel relax
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but
they never understand the
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bad
impacts of
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youngers
and minors becoming lazy and due to this, they are not fit in
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.
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Sometimes
they indulge in
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bad
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companies
and
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make
fake accounts to hack others accounts or utilize their remunerations in computer
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games
to win levels and other
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so
on. To instance, In India there was a boy named
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jasdeep
, he
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expand
his 60, 000 in
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game to win levels and weapons.

However
, there are
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measures to resolve that issues.
Firstly
, parents should
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make
stringent norms for their kids and
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play
physical
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games
with them which is
extremely
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good
for the
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health
. They
also
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make
schedules for their
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childrens
which includes all the activities like exercises, playing outdoor
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games
, eat organic and
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hygeinic
meals and
also
gave electronic gadgets to access for a short period of
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time
to communicate and interact with their friends and relatives.
Furthermore
, tutors provide awareness in classrooms, through
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small
functions and lectures to new generations to
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use
less
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time
to
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those
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and
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this, they do physical exercises like yoga, walk, run to sharp their brain, enhance their stamina and
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get
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rid from
mental and physical diseases.
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IELTS essay Many doctors are concerned about the use of computer games by children and young. what mental and physical problems arise and what are the solutions

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