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Recently published figures show that the wildlife population around the world has decreased by around fifty per cent over the last fifty years. What can we do to help protect the wildlife round the world?

Recently published figures show that the wildlife population around the world has decreased by around fifty per cent over the last fifty years. What can we do to help protect the wildlife round the world? XgGP
Humans have become a prime culprit for the destruction of the wildlife population around the world. Humans believe that they are the most powerful species on this planet and have therefore chosen to use all of nature’s resources for their own good, even if this results in the destruction of the environment around them. Clearly, this is not a positive result of human existence and many people believe that the world’s wildlife population should be better protected. One possible way to protect wildlife around the world is to reduce the amount of polluted substances produced through the human way of life. It has become habitual for people to pollute water by adding chemicals to it during industrial processes or to pollute air as a result of the fossil fuel industries and car emissions. Stopping the addition of chemicals to water and creating cleaner processes would reduce water pollution and help create a safer environment for wildlife to live in. Increasing the availability and use of public transportation and increasing the use of renewable energy sources could reduce world pollution further. Another possible attempt to protect wildlife around the world is to actively promote recycling projects to reduce the amount of resources that are wasted. This would lessen the degradation of the natural environment, as humans continue to search for new resources. Society uses a lot of paper and wood on a daily basis and people do not actively think about whether or not they are wasting these resources. Printing double-sided or on recycled paper for example would appear to change nothing, yet if carried out regularly would help make a difference. In conclusion, there are numerous different ways in which every human being can help to protect the wildlife population around the world. One can engage in projects to raise awareness of environmental destruction or one can actively take part in activities to protect it. Everyone must find the area in which he or she would like to involve him or herself, as all should be obliged to protect wildlife around the world.
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believe that they are the most powerful species on this planet and have
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use
all of nature’s resources for their
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good
, even if this results in the destruction of the environment
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positive
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existence and
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people
believe that the
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world’s
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wildlife
population should be better protected.

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protect
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wildlife
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around
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world
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reduce
the amount of polluted substances produced through the
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human
way of life. It has become habitual for
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people
to pollute water by adding chemicals to it during industrial processes or to pollute air
as a result
of the fossil fuel industries and car emissions. Stopping the addition of chemicals to water and creating cleaner processes would
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reduce
water pollution and
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help
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live
in. Increasing the availability and
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of public transportation and increasing the
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use
of renewable energy sources could
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reduce
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world
pollution
further
.

Another possible attempt to
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protect
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wildlife
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around
the
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world
is to
actively
promote recycling projects to
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reduce
the amount of resources that
are wasted
. This would lessen the degradation of the natural environment, as
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humans
continue to search for new resources. Society
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uses
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protect
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around
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. One can engage in projects to raise awareness of environmental destruction or one can
actively
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take part
in activities to
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protect
it. Everyone
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world
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IELTS essay Recently published figures show that the wildlife population around the world has decreased by around fifty per cent over the last fifty years. What can we do to help protect the wildlife round the world?

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