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Reading passage An airship is a type of aircraft that flies using a very large balloon filled with a lighter than air gas Airships were an important means of air transportation before the 1940s but are little used today having been largely replaced by air

Reading passage An airship is a type of aircraft that flies using a very large balloon filled with a lighter than air gas Airships were an important means of air transportation before the 1940s but are little used today having been largely replaced by air MMLw6
After replaced by airplanes and helicopters earlier in the 1940s, some engineers still believe that the Airships could be used in the pace of airplanes and helicopters again. Both the lecturer and the reading are on opposite ends about this possibility. The lecturer casts doubt about the claim mentioned in the article and refutes all the ideas presented in the article, while the author of the article offers several theories to justify the replacement of Airships. According to the article, Airship demands less fuel to run its engine compared to airplanes and helicopters. Nonetheless, the speaker negates the argument presented in the passage. Furthermore, he discusses that Airship requires gas such as Hydrogen and Helium in order to lift in the air which has their own disadvantages. For instance. Hydrogen can easily catch fire that leads to cause major accidents which were very common before the 1940s. Meanwhile, Helium is hard to find and really expensive and also, it does not have lifting power like Hydrogen gas. Hence, even though Airship sounds more economically better, but logically, it is not a safe option. The passage highlights that Airships have the capacity to carry heavy loads, especially from rural locations. However, the narrator refutes this by asserting that since it required stability and steadiness to carry large and heavy loads in an Airship. Consequently, there is a high chance to occur an accident in the forest because it would be difficult to hold the Airship steady in the air, particularly, during windy conditions. Last but not least, the text explains that Airship not only can replace the satellite but also helps to save money by using it. On the contrary, the speaker again opposes the theory and describes that it is true that Airships can fly up to a height of 14km from the surface, but at the same time, it needs to face a lot of wind at the height where it will utilize a lot of fuel to resist the wind at this height. Consequently, it demands to refuel it again and again which will make the whole process interrupted. Thus, this substitution is not a fruitful option.
After replaced by airplanes and helicopters earlier in the 1940s,
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some
engineers
still
believe that the
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Airships
could be
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used
in the pace of airplanes and helicopters
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again
. Both the lecturer and the reading are on opposite ends about this possibility. The lecturer casts doubt about the claim mentioned in the
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article
and refutes all the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ideas
presented in the
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article
, while the author of the
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article
offers several theories to justify the replacement of Airships.

According to the
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article
,
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Airship
demands less fuel to run its engine compared to airplanes and helicopters. Nonetheless, the speaker negates the argument presented in the passage.
Furthermore
, he discusses that
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Airship
requires gas such as Hydrogen and Helium in order to lift in the air which has their
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own
disadvantages.
For instance
. Hydrogen can
easily
catch fire that leads to cause major accidents which were
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very
common
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before
the 1940s. Meanwhile, Helium is
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hard
to find and
really
expensive and
also
, it does not have lifting power like Hydrogen gas.
Hence
,
even though
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Airship
sounds more
economically
better,
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but
logically
, it is not a safe option.

The passage highlights that
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Airships
have the capacity to carry heavy loads,
especially
from rural locations.
However
, the narrator refutes this by asserting that since it required stability and steadiness to carry large and heavy loads in an
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Airship
.
Consequently
, there is a high chance to occur an accident in the forest
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because
it would be difficult to hold the
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Airship
steady in the air,
particularly
, during windy conditions.

Last
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but
not least, the text
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explains
that
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Airship
not
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only
can replace the satellite
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but
also
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helps
to save money by using it.
On the contrary
, the speaker
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again
opposes the theory and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
describes
that it is true that
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Airships
can
fly
up to a height of
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14km
from the surface,
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but
at the same time, it needs to face
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a lot of
wind at the height where it will utilize
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a lot of
fuel to resist the wind at this height.
Consequently
, it demands to refuel it
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again
and
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again
which will
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make
the whole process interrupted.
Thus
, this substitution is not a fruitful option.
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IELTS essay Reading passage An airship is a type of aircraft that flies using a very large balloon filled with a lighter than air gas Airships were an important means of air transportation before the 1940s but are little used today having been largely replaced by air

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
359 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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