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Question: The polarization of politics is leading to a breakdown in civil society and ensuring more precarious situation for all world citizens. What do you believe are the causes of this? What actions can be taken to solve this problem?

Question: The polarization of politics is leading to a breakdown in civil society and ensuring more precarious situation for all world citizens. What do you believe are the causes of this? What actions can be taken to solve this problem? br0VW
The surge of political division among people has created a perilous situation for society. The clash between political parties hasn’t been as clear as it is now. This has been caused due to the diversification of groups and the spread of fake news. Although complete eradication isn’t plausible, it can be reduced by educating the next generation and increasing awareness of the harmful effects of mass media. To begin with, more freedom on citizens has branched out hundreds of groups. As there haven’t been many common enemies in the United States recently, new ideologies, religions, and groups have been formed over the last few years. This has lead to the inevitable growth of extremist groups in politics. For instance, in the United States, where the Republicans and Democrats dominate the elections, the parties have been becoming more and more extremists to get extra votes. To add, the spread of fake news and social media has had made a huge impact. To generate higher views and click rates, there have been faker, more provocative information published, rather than truthful information. This has increased the resentment towards the opposing parties, which increased political polarization. It is true that the complete vanishment of political polarization is nearly impossible. However, there can be actions taken to solve this problem. In the long term, educating the next generation, so that they do not make the same mistakes as past generations did would be a huge leap forward. As for now, increasing awareness of the harmful effects of social media and mass media on politics is the priority. For instance, researchers of Waseda University have stated that over 90% of readers of provocative, fake news articles are shared with their families or friends. Hence, increasing awareness of this is a crucial action that has to be taken, in order to prevent more of this from occurring. The ever-growing political polarization has caused immense trouble to society. This has been caused by the diversification of ideologies that lead to extremists political parties. However, with the right education and the increase of awareness of issues with fake news, this could be reduced.
The surge of political division among
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has
created a perilous situation for society. The clash between political
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parties
hasn’t been as
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clear
as it is
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now
. This has
been caused
due to the diversification of
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groups
and the spread of
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fake
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news
. Although complete eradication isn’t plausible, it can be
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reduced
by educating the
next
generation and increasing
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awareness
of the harmful effects of mass media.

To
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begin
with, more freedom on citizens has branched out hundreds of
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groups
. As there haven’t been
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many
common enemies in the United States recently,
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new
ideologies, religions, and
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groups
have
been formed
over the last few years. This has lead to the inevitable growth of extremist
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groups
in politics.
For instance
, in the United States, where the Republicans and Democrats dominate the elections, the
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parties
have been becoming more and more extremists to
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get
extra votes. To
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, the spread of
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fake
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news
and social media has had made a huge impact. To generate higher views and click rates, there have been faker, more provocative information published,
rather
than truthful information. This has increased the resentment towards the opposing
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parties
, which increased political polarization.

It is true that the complete
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of political polarization is
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impossible.
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, there can be actions taken to solve this problem. In the long term, educating the
next
generation,
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so
that they do not
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make
the same mistakes as past generations did
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would
be a huge leap forward. As for
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, increasing
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awareness
of the harmful effects of social media and mass media on politics is the priority.
For instance
, researchers of
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Waseda
University have stated that over 90% of readers of provocative,
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fake
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news
articles
are shared
with their families or friends.
Hence
, increasing
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awareness
of this is a crucial action that
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has to
be taken
, in order to
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prevent
more of this from occurring.

The ever-growing political polarization has caused immense trouble to society. This has
been caused
by the diversification of ideologies that lead to extremists political
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parties
.
However
, with the right education and the increase of
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awareness
of issues with
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fake
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news
, this could be
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reduced
.
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IELTS essay Question: The polarization of politics is leading to a breakdown in civil society and ensuring more precarious situation for all world citizens. What do you believe are the causes of this? What actions can be taken to solve this problem?

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