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In many countries today, parents are able to choose to send their children to single sex schools or co-educational Schools. Some people think that children going to single sex schools have the disadvantages later in life. To what extent do you agree? v.1

In many countries today, parents are able to choose to send their children to single sex schools or co-educational Schools. Some people think that children going to single sex schools have the disadvantages later in life. v. 1
Nowadays parents have the option of sending their children either to single-sex schools or mixed schools. While single-gender schools are thought by some to have a negative impact later in a child’s life, I partially disagree with this notion as studying in single-sex schools has some merits as well. On the one hand, co-educational schools often mirror the real world which lacks in single-gender schools. Studying with opposite gender facilitates communication and understanding among students and they learn team working skills that will be essential in their future career. Moreover, girls and boys have different perspectives about various things and they are never able to understand and respect this difference if they have never studied together. It has also been observed that people who have studied in single-sex schools are less confident while speaking to an audience consisting of both genders. Hence, there are certain aspects of life where students, studying with same gender, may suffer. On the other hand, sending male and female students to separate schools is often due to some religious or cultural beliefs. In teenage, students tend to develop early relationships triggered by hormone changes. Thus, studying with same sex students results in less distraction and indiscipline, leading to effective class time. Furthermore, girls are often believed to be fast learners. They develop and progress quicker than the male students. Therefore, studying in single-sex schools offer both genders a platform where they can learn at their own pace. Also, there are certain sections of study such as human biology that teachers find difficult to teach in the same depth to both genders in the same classroom and this can easily be resolved by resorting to different schools for both genders. Finally, attributed by the effectiveness and quality of classroom sessions, students at single-sex schools often get better exam grades. In conclusion, I believe that studying in single-sex schools has certain advantages that cannot be overlooked by its disadvantages and parents can be the best critics to decide the appropriate kind of school to send their children for getting educated.
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schools
or mixed
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schools
. While single-gender
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schools
are
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thought
by
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some
to have a
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negative
impact later in a child’s life, I
partially
disagree with this notion as
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studying
in single-sex
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schools
has
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some
merits
as well
.

On the one hand, co-educational
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schools
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often
mirror the real world which lacks in single-gender
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schools
.
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Studying
with opposite gender facilitates communication and understanding among
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students and
they learn team working
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skills
that will be essential in their future career.
Moreover
, girls and boys have
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different
The usual preposition for "perspectives" is "on" not "about." Revise: "perspectives on".
perspectives about
various
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things and
they are never able to understand and respect this difference if they have never studied together. It has
also
been observed
that
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people
who have studied in single-sex
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schools
are less confident while speaking to an audience consisting of both genders.
Hence
, there are certain aspects of life where
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students
,
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studying
with same gender, may suffer.

On the other hand
, sending male and female
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students
to separate
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schools
is
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often
due to
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some
religious or cultural beliefs. In teenage,
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students
tend to develop early relationships triggered by hormone
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changes
.
Thus
,
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studying
with same sex
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students
results in less distraction and indiscipline, leading to effective
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
time.
Furthermore
, girls are
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often
believed to be
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fast
learners. They develop and progress quicker than the male
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students
.
Therefore
,
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studying
in single-sex
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schools
offer both genders a platform where they can learn at their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
pace.
Also
, there are certain sections of study such as human biology that teachers find difficult to teach in the same depth to both genders in the same classroom and this can
easily
be resolved
by resorting to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
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schools
for both genders.
Finally
, attributed by the effectiveness and quality of classroom sessions,
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students
at single-sex
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schools
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often
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
better exam grades.

In conclusion
, I believe that
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studying
in single-sex
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schools
has certain advantages that cannot
be overlooked
by its disadvantages and parents can be the best critics to decide the appropriate kind of
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school
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
their children for getting educated.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay In many countries today, parents are able to choose to send their children to single sex schools or co-educational Schools. Some people think that children going to single sex schools have the disadvantages later in life. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
343 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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