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Question: An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. What are the advantages and disadvantages for both individuals and companies to shopping online? v.1

Question: An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. What are the advantages and disadvantages for both individuals and companies to shopping online? v. 1
These days, Computers are translating a very quickly and accurately of the speech. But what is the most effective method for dealing with the learning of foreign speech is wasting time? I completely agree with this essay that I will support my opinion with examples. First of all, Laptops are using many people in society. Technology has developed around the world to change of mother tongue into another a lingo. Presently, the Internet is using more people of the native tongue that doing a very fast in their works also clarity. For example, students are applying of other countries to great benefits. There is an understanding probably of the application to use for everyone. RWTH University in Germany is preferable for masters also good job opportunities. Secondly, the learning of a foreign lingo is difficult for students. Furthermore, Most of them are thinking about a waste of time and money, But they are valuing knowledge. For instance, People who are not going to other countries, but they can learn. It does not give to skills about the tongue. There are wasting cash for the value of a set, yet some of the people do not have any values to prepare the language. It depends upon your the profile to get ready. In conclusion, although it is a common belief that desktops translate faster and clarity than learning of native language for a waste of clock. While there are easy to translate for technology is improving. I believe that learning of the language is damaging for money also an event.
These days, Computers are translating a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
quickly
and
accurately
of the speech.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
what is the most effective method for dealing with the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
of foreign speech is wasting time? I completely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with this essay that I will support my opinion with examples.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, Laptops are using
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
in society. Technology has developed around the world to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
of mother tongue into another a lingo.
Presently
, the Internet is using more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
of the native tongue that doing a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
fast
in their works
also
clarity.
For example
, students are applying of other countries to great benefits. There is an understanding
probably
of the application to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
for everyone.
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RWTH
University in Germany is preferable for masters
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
job opportunities.

Secondly
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
of a foreign lingo is difficult for students.
Furthermore
, Most of them are thinking about a waste of time and money,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
they are valuing knowledge.
For instance
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
People
who are not going to other countries,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
they can learn. It does not give to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
about the tongue. There are wasting cash for the value of a set,
yet
If the text is a generality, 'of the' is not necessary. Did you mean "some"?
some of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
do not have any values to prepare the language. It depends upon your the profile to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
ready.

In conclusion
, although it is a common belief that desktops translate faster and clarity than
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
of native language for a waste of clock. While there are easy to translate for technology is improving. I believe that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
of the language is damaging for money
also
an
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
event
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
You can never understand one language until you understand at least two.
Geoffrey Willans

IELTS essay Question: An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. What are the advantages and disadvantages for both individuals and companies to shopping online? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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