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Question 5: The women can go on a field trip but she promissed professor Clark to help to set up the new exibition at the university museum. Describe the problem and the two solutions. Explain what you think the women should do an why. v.1

Question 5: The women can go on a field trip but she promissed professor Clark to help to set up the new exibition at the university museum. Describe the problem and the two solutions. Explain what you think the women should do an why. v. 1
Recently, shopping has become increasingly popular among most of the people. Does this practice rely on the generation, or on some other components? This argument has become a contentious issue. I am in accord with this argument, but holds some variations. I believe, however, age-brackets influence buying-habits, but there are other factors like media influence and economic status of the person. In this essay we will discuss all these points and will draw an inference. Whenever, a hot wheel car is manufactured in a factory, the considered consumer of that toy is a juvenile. Similarly, it can be observed that adolescents and teenagers prefer buying electronic gadgets, so that, they can download numerous games on them and play. However, age is not a dominant element accountable for any purchasing trend. There are other factors that affect this vogue. Firstly, provided that, an individual is not influenced by the purchase of a particular product, he will not pursue for it. Here, media plays a vital role. People get influenced by the adverts that are done by their favourite celebrities and sports person. Having said that, they buy these products to abide by them. To illustrate, people buy fairness creams, cold-drink of a particular brand and so on, if they are featured by a celebrity. Hence, Media has potential to affect the buying habits of people. Secondly, socioeconomic status of a person also depicts the buying rage because of their more purchasing power. People tend to buy more when they have more disposable income. A study by the marketing department of Ontario university has shown that the wealthy people buy 30% more than others, even if, they are not in need of that product. As a result, wealth-status also become an additional-factor to this trend. To recapitulate, having mulled over the above information, and deliberating all the facts, it can be deducted that shopping routines belong to many other components than the generation pack. I strongly feel that people buy products when they are completely influenced by the usage of it, irrespective of the age groups they belong to. Purchasing power and social influence are also the factors to depict buying preferences of people.
Recently, shopping has become
increasingly
popular among most of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
. Does this practice rely on the generation, or on
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
components? This argument has become a contentious issue. I am in accord with this argument,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
holds
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
variations. I believe,
however
, age-brackets influence buying-habits,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
there are
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
factors like media influence and economic status of the person. In this essay we will discuss all these points and will draw an inference.

Whenever, a hot wheel car
is manufactured
in a factory, the considered consumer of that toy is a juvenile.
Similarly
, it can
be observed
that adolescents and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
teenagers
prefer
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buying
electronic gadgets,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that, they can download numerous games on them and play.
However
, age is not a dominant element accountable for any purchasing trend. There are
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
factors that affect this vogue.

Firstly
, provided that, an individual is not influenced by the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
of a particular
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
product
, he will not pursue for it. Here, media plays a vital role.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
People
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
influenced by the adverts that
are done
by their
Possible spelling mistake. 'favourite' is British English.
favourite
celebrities and sports person. Having said that, they
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buy
these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
to abide by them. To illustrate,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buy
fairness creams,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cold
-drink of a particular brand and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
on, if they
are featured
by a celebrity.
Hence
, Media has potential to affect the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buying
habits of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
.

Secondly
, socioeconomic status of a person
also
depicts the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buying
rage
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of their more purchasing power.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
People
tend to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buy
more when they have more disposable income. A study by the marketing department of Ontario university has shown that the wealthy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buy
30% more than others, even if, they are not in need of that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
product
.
As a result
, wealth-status
also
become an additional-factor to this trend.

To recapitulate, having mulled over the above information, and deliberating all the facts, it can
be deducted
that shopping routines belong to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
components than the generation pack. I
strongly
feel that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
when they are completely influenced by the usage of it, irrespective of the age groups they belong to. Purchasing power and social influence are
also
the factors to depict
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buying
preferences of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Question 5: The women can go on a field trip but she promissed professor Clark to help to set up the new exibition at the university museum. Describe the problem and the two solutions. Explain what you think the women should do an why. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
362 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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