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q3: The students discus the requirement from the Political Science sylabuss. State how they react to this section of the syllabus. v.1

q3: The students discus the requirement from the Political Science sylabuss. State how they react to this section of the syllabus. v. 1
People have different views about accommodation, some people believe that cities have a higher standard, while, other people think that living rural regions are better. In my opinion, I agree the first statement that living in cities are more convenience. On the one hand, living in cities brings a lot of benefit due to many reasons. Firstly, city life presents a chance of improving in career, and people can look for better opportunities. For instance, almost young people tend to live and work in urban after graduate because this place are economic growth center. Secondly, cities are an ideal place for shopping. Obviously, the large brand stores to smaller have opened in cities; therefore, people can purchase anything that they want easily. For example, when people travel, they usually choose hotels in cities because this convenience for shopping. On the other hand, rural living is also some advantages because of several causes. The first point, living in the rural is beneficial for health as it is not affected by a vast of waste gases that come out from means of transport. To illustrate, there is a tendency for people to use bike cycles in village sections; thus, the environment in this place is less pollution. The second point, living in the countryside is peaceful; consequently, it is a place suitable to people can relax and enjoy after period busy working. Moreover, village remain the plenty of beautiful land cases. In conclusion, many people agree that living in the cities are better because having a great deal of chance to develop careers, and convenience to purchase; while, other people like to live in villages due to clearer air and having space to rest.
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have
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different
views about accommodation,
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some
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people
believe that
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cities
have a higher standard, while, other
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people
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think
that
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living
rural regions are better. In my opinion, I
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agree
the
first
statement that
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living
in
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cities
are more convenience.

On the one hand,
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living
in
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cities
brings
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a lot of
benefit due to
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many
reasons.
Firstly
, city life presents a chance of improving in career, and
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people
can look for better opportunities.
For instance
, almost young
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people
tend to
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live
and work in urban after graduate
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because
this
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place
are economic growth center.
Secondly
,
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cities
are an ideal
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place
for shopping.
Obviously
, the large brand stores to smaller have opened in
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cities
;
therefore
,
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people
can
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purchase
anything that they want
easily
.
For example
, when
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people
travel, they
usually
choose hotels in
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cities
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because
this convenience for shopping.

On the other hand
, rural
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living
is
also
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some
advantages
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because
of several causes. The
first
point,
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living
in the rural is beneficial for health as it is not
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affected
by a vast of waste gases that
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come
out from means of transport. To illustrate, there is a tendency for
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people
to
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use
bike cycles in village sections;
thus
, the environment in this
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place
is less pollution. The second point,
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living
in the countryside is peaceful;
consequently
, it is a
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place
suitable to
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people
can relax and enjoy after period busy working.
Moreover
, village remain the
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plenty
of
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beautiful
land cases.

In conclusion
,
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many
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people
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agree
that
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living
in the
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cities
are better
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because
having a great deal of chance to develop careers, and convenience to
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purchase
; while, other
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people
like to
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live
in villages due to clearer air and having space to rest.
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IELTS essay q3: The students discus the requirement from the Political Science sylabuss. State how they react to this section of the syllabus. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
282 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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