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Question 1 Imagine your life ten years in the future. Talk about one way you think your life will be different in ten years than it is now. Use details to explain your answer. v.1

Question 1 Imagine your life ten years in the future. Talk about one way you think your life will be different in ten years than it is now. Use details to explain your answer. v. 1
It is argued that possessing a huge amount of wealth is the best way to achieve joy in life. Undeniably, money can fulfil the materialistic needs of an individual who seeks elation from such accomplishments. However, money is not the only key to happiness. There are other ways as well and simple everyday things like enjoying a hot coffee on a cold morning or sharing the dinner table with loved ones can also make us happy and delighted. Helping people in need such as homeless children and destitute sections of the society is another way to find happiness in life. First and foremost, people who are financially sound could easily fulfil the materialistic needs and desires of their life which in return gives them a sense of satisfaction. Compared to middle class people, the affluent sections of the society can easily satisfy their materialistic needs and wants like buying high end cars, travelling to exotic locations or wearing expensive brands. Furthermore, the rich people have the luxury of getting the best health care treatments which is not exactly available to the common man. On the flip side, apart from materialistic wants, an individual can seek happiness from various other things. One of them is sharing the dining table with family after a tiring day at the office. Certainly, eating with the loved ones automatically eliminates stress and worries. Secondly, rendering help to poor and needy could also give some sense of achievement. For example, financial aid to people who seek medical help probably is the best way to embrace elation. To conclude, admittedly, it is quite evident from the aforementioned instances that money buys you all the materialistic comforts in the world. Nevertheless, spending time with close ones and helping the impoverished could also bring delight.
It
is argued
that possessing a huge amount of wealth is the best way to achieve joy in life.
Undeniably
, money can fulfil the
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materialistic
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needs
of an individual who seeks elation from such accomplishments.
However
, money is not the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
key to happiness. There are other ways
as well
and simple everyday things like enjoying a hot coffee on a
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cold
morning or sharing the dinner table with
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loved
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ones
can
also
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make
us happy and delighted. Helping
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people
in
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need
such as homeless children and destitute sections of the society is another way to find happiness in life.

First
and foremost,
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people
who are
financially
sound could
easily
fulfil the
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materialistic
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needs
and desires of their life which in return gives them a sense of satisfaction. Compared to middle
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class
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people
, the affluent sections of the society can
easily
satisfy their
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materialistic
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needs
and wants like buying high
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end
cars, travelling to exotic locations or wearing expensive brands.
Furthermore
, the rich
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people
have the luxury of getting the best health care treatments which is not exactly available to the common
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man
.

On the flip side, apart from
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materialistic
wants, an individual can seek happiness from various other things. One of them is sharing the dining table with family after a tiring day at the office.
Certainly
, eating with the
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loved
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ones
automatically
eliminates
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stress
and worries.
Secondly
, rendering
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help
to poor and needy could
also
give
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some
sense of achievement.
For example
, financial aid to
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people
who seek medical
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help
probably
is the best way to embrace elation.

To conclude
,
admittedly
, it is quite evident from the aforementioned instances that money
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buys
you all the
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materialistic
comforts in the world.
Nevertheless
, spending time with close
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ones
and helping the impoverished could
also
bring delight.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Question 1 Imagine your life ten years in the future. Talk about one way you think your life will be different in ten years than it is now. Use details to explain your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
296 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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