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q3. The men expresses his opinion about the discussion section. State His opinion and the reasons he gives to hold that opinion. v.1

q3. The men expresses his opinion about the discussion section. State His opinion and the reasons he gives to hold that opinion. v. 1
For the time being, it has always been a controversial issue amongst people whether to keep the traditional libraries or to replace all of them as boundless development in technology has brought numerous alternatives instead. I highly believe that despite all the available options, sticking to the long-established perspective towards this issue, indicating that having libraries is essential, gives the impression of being of the most reliable. Firstly, it is argued that the benefits of using eBooks outweigh the published books. It is believed so because publishing books are considered harmful to the environment causing even more damage in a long term due to the paper consumption. The more paper used to print books, the more trees are cut down. While this may be true, we cannot set fire to existing libraries and close them down for some signed editions, which needs to be referred to in some cases, are kept in ancient libraries. Therefore, it is vital that the books be accessible in both printed and electronic types. So that, it will also be fair to the people who are not able to read books on their gadgets. For example, newly written books can be released online at first and in case of success, will be printed for public access. Secondly, some believe that through some technological advances you are in a position to have access to all sources at once conveniently. This is veracious since you can listen to your favored books during the day; meanwhile you are dealing with your daily life issues. In addition, it enables you to search for any content on all the resources worldwide if you are a premium user. This point of view is accepted at some points; but others, however, are of the opinion that having access to anything, anytime may lead to some crucial problems in all aspects; for instance, killing enthusiasm for research, creativity, and most importantly enhancing some academic erroneous attitudes as plagiarism. That is resulted because searchable information, gives you a sophisticated insight of the issue. Furthermore, individuals congregate in a rather scholastic environment, which does not appear to be disadvantageous. In conclusion, I absolutely disagree that all the libraries have to be shut down. While, as is mentioned above, the proponents of this idea are rightful in some particular situations, it is impossible to refuse the indispensable role of libraries in the society.
For the time being, it has always been a controversial
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issue
amongst
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
whether to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
the traditional libraries or to replace all of them as boundless development in technology has brought numerous alternatives
instead
. I
highly
believe that despite all the available options, sticking to the long-established perspective towards this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
issue
, indicating that having libraries is essential, gives the impression of being of the most reliable.

Firstly
, it
is argued
that the benefits of using
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eBooks
outweigh the published
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books
. It
is believed
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so
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because
publishing
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books
are considered
harmful to the environment causing even more damage in a long term due to the paper consumption. The more paper
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used
to print
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books
, the more trees are
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cut
down. While this may be true, we cannot set fire to existing libraries and close them down for
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some
signed editions, which needs to
be referred
to in
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some
cases, are
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kept
in ancient libraries.
Therefore
, it is vital that the
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books
be accessible in both printed and electronic types.
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So
that, it will
also
be
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fair
to the
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people
who are not able to read
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books
on their gadgets.
For example
,
newly
written
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books
can
be released
online at
first
and in case of success, will
be printed
for public access.

Secondly
,
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some
believe that through
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some
technological advances you are in a position to have access to all sources at once
conveniently
. This is veracious since you can listen to your favored
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
during the day; meanwhile you are dealing with your daily life
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issues
.
In addition
, it enables you to search for any content on all the resources worldwide if you are a premium user. This point of view is
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accepted
at
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some
points;
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but
others,
however
, are of the opinion that having access to anything, anytime may lead to
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some
crucial problems in all aspects;
for instance
, killing enthusiasm for research, creativity, and most
importantly
enhancing
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
academic erroneous attitudes as plagiarism. That
is resulted
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
searchable information, gives you a sophisticated insight of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
issue
.
Furthermore
, individuals congregate in a
rather
scholastic environment, which does not appear to be disadvantageous.

In conclusion
, I
absolutely
disagree that all the libraries
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have to
be shut
down. While, as
is mentioned
above, the proponents of this
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idea
are rightful in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
particular situations, it is impossible to refuse the indispensable role of libraries in the society.
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IELTS essay q3. The men expresses his opinion about the discussion section. State His opinion and the reasons he gives to hold that opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
397 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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