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q1. What make you choose a restaurant. Give details and examples to support your explanation. v.1

q1. What make you choose a restaurant. Give details and examples to support your explanation. v. 1
Unforeseen events, social disturbances keep on happening in the cities. And to control the showcase of public anger, government keeps on imposing curfew from time to time. In such state, teenagers are not allowed to go out alone after some particular point at night unless they are being accompanied by an adult. Considering human safety, I totally agree with this imposition. Curfew can be imposed for different reasons. Most commonly, when people of nation do not agree with the government's decisions, to control their anger, it is being imposed. For example, In India, recently, a Citizenship Amendment bill has been passed. Indians are not happy with that bill, hence they are opposing it. So to control the human show of anger, and to maintain harmony in nation, police has imposed curfew in various parts of the country. Moreover, the government can impose curfew due to safety concerns. For instant, if there is a terror attack in any part of the city, then it will be imposed in that part of the city. So that no human being is being harmed, as there will still be danger of more attacks. In the state of curfew, teenagers and children should not go out of doors, as there is potential risk involved in getting them being hurt. However, they can go out under some supervision by an adult. It helps them in keeping safe. It is for their own safety, that such rules are being made. Hence, they should abide by these rules. In conclusion, I totally agree with teenagers not being allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night, when the curfew is being imposed. It is vital for their own protection. Also, the guardians at home will be calm, knowing that they are not alone outside.
Unforeseen
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events
, social disturbances
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keep
on happening in the cities. And to control the showcase of public anger,
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government
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keeps
on imposing
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curfew
from time to time. In such state,
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teenagers
are not
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allowed
to go out alone after
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some
particular point at night unless they are
being accompanied
by an adult. Considering human safety, I
totally
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agree
with this imposition.

Curfew can be
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imposed
for
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different
reasons. Most
commonly
, when
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people
of nation do not
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agree
with the
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government
's decisions, to control their anger, it is being
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
imposed
.
For example
, In India, recently, a Citizenship Amendment bill has
been passed
. Indians are not happy with that bill,
hence
they are opposing it.
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So
to control the human
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show
of anger, and to maintain harmony in nation, police has
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imposed
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curfew
in various parts of the country.

Moreover
, the
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government
can impose
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curfew
due to safety concerns. For instant, if there is a terror attack in any part of the city, then it will be
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imposed
in that part of the city.
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So
that no human being is
being harmed
, as there will
still
be
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danger
of more attacks.

In the state of
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curfew
,
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teenagers
and children should not go out of doors, as there is potential
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risk
involved in getting them
being hurt
.
However
, they can go out under
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some
supervision by an adult. It
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helps
them in keeping safe. It is for their
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own
safety, that such
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rules
are
being made
.
Hence
, they should abide by these
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rules
.

In conclusion
, I
totally
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agree
with
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teenagers
not being
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allowed
to be out of doors after a particular time at night, when the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
curfew
is being
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imposed
. It is vital for their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
protection.
Also
, the guardians at home will be calm, knowing that they are not alone outside.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay q1. What make you choose a restaurant. Give details and examples to support your explanation. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
299 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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