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Q. Is money or job satisfaction is more important to consider when choosing a career ?

Q. Is money or job satisfaction is more important to consider when choosing a career? bYBNl
In today’s era, it is very crucial for an individual to choose an adequate professional path in this rapidly changing world. It became a vital part of a person’s life to choose the right direction for the career based on its monetary value or job satisfaction. In this essay, we will discuss both sides arguments. Firstly, money is a basic requirement for any human being for their survival. It is one of the major reason we invest in ourself for years and years in our studies, gaining knowledge or job/business to have a suitable life. This can be considered a powerful tool which can make our dreams come true. One can have a lavish lifestyle, a big house, a dream car, and a higher status in society. All these factors has to be taken into evaluation while deciding the path of your life. These days a person with the most money is considered as highly reputable and powerful in the world. However, on the flip side of a coin. It should be also taken into account that, only focusing on money, can cost you an untimate satisfaction of life. Only having money but, not having a life which you enjoy is not worth anything. Having the passion for your work, balance between family and professional life as well as the place where you enjoy spending most of your time in your day to day life has to be taken as a major point in you career. Job satisfaction comes with a benefits of living a stress free life and which directly impacts on our mental health. In the nutshell, a balaced approach has to be maintained while slecting a proper career path. All major contributors should be evelauted for having a sufficient amount of money and valution of having peaceful stable future.
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crucial for an individual to choose an adequate professional path in this
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changing world. It became a vital part of a person’s
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to choose the right direction for the career based on its monetary value or job satisfaction. In this essay, we will discuss both sides arguments.

Firstly
,
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money
is a basic requirement for any human being for their survival. It is one of the major reason we invest in
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ourself
for years and years in our studies, gaining knowledge or job/business to have a suitable
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life
. This can
be considered
a powerful tool which can
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make
our dreams
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true. One can have a lavish lifestyle, a
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big
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house
, a dream car, and a higher status in society. All these factors
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has to
be taken
into evaluation while deciding the path of your
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life
. These days a person with the most
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money
is considered
as
highly
reputable and powerful in the world.

However
, on the flip side of a coin. It should be
also
taken into account that,
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focusing on
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, can cost you an
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, not
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which you enjoy is not worth anything.
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the passion for your work, balance between family and professional
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as well
as the place where you enjoy spending most of your time in your
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day to day
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a benefits
of living a
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free
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and which
directly
impacts on our mental health.

In the nutshell, a
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balaced
approach
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slecting
a proper career path. All major contributors should be
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evelauted
for
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a sufficient amount of
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valution
of
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peaceful stable future.
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IELTS essay Q. Is money or job satisfaction is more important to consider when choosing a career?

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