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Public libraries should provide books and not waste their limited resources on expensive high-tech media such as software, videos or Dvds. Do you agree or disagree?

Public libraries should provide books and not waste their limited resources on expensive high-tech media such as software, videos or Dvds. XARE
Instead of ruining their limited resources on costly advanced media such as software, DVDS or videos, people’s libraries must arrange books. This essay agrees that libraries in a city should provide books instead of wasting money on media like software. Firstly, the thought process of people will increase by using books. Secondly, there is high percentage of getting eye sight by using DVDS or certain high - advanced media. While reading books, people imagine the whole scenario right infont of there eye’s which in turn increases their thinking capacity or thought process. For instance recently, a study was conducted by researchers in university of Toronto in which they stated that people who read books daily can improve there though process. Human eye’s can damage by watching computer screens for long period of time which results in eye sight. For example, the study published by time of India in 2019 argued that more than 70% of young childreen got eye sight by watching computer screen’s for long period of time. In conclusion, Public libraries should waste their limited money on high tech media like software or DVds which in fact results in eye sight among young childreen and damaging their thought process.
Instead
of ruining their limited resources on costly advanced media such as software,
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DVDS
or videos,
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people’s
libraries
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must
arrange
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books
. This essay
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agrees
that libraries in a city should provide
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books
instead
of wasting money on media like software.
Firstly
, the
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thought
process of
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people
will increase by using
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books
.
Secondly
, there is high percentage of getting
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eye
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sight
by using
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DVDS
or certain high
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-
advanced media.

While reading
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books
,
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people
imagine the whole scenario right
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infont
of
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there
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eye’s
which in turn increases their thinking capacity or
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thought
process.
For instance
recently, a study
was conducted
by researchers in university of Toronto in which they stated that
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people
who read
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books
daily can
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improve
there though process.

Human
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eye’s
can damage by watching computer screens for long period of time which results in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
eye
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sight
.
For example
, the study published by time of India in 2019 argued that more than 70% of young
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childreen
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got
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eye
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sight
by watching computer screen’s for long period of time.

In conclusion
, Public libraries should waste their limited money on high tech media like software or
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DVds
which in fact results in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
eye
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sight
among young
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childreen
and damaging their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thought
process.
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IELTS essay Public libraries should provide books and not waste their limited resources on expensive high-tech media such as software, videos or Dvds.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
201 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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