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Public libraries should provide books and not waste their limited resources on expensive high-tech media such as software, videos or DVDs. v.2

Public libraries should provide books and not waste their limited resources on expensive high-tech media such as software, videos or DVDs. v. 2
Over the past few years, the advances in high-tech media have started to change many aspects of our lives. Some people think that the public libraries should offer the unlimited access to software, videos and DVDs; while others hold that it is only a waste of money. I tend to agree that public libraries need to be equipped with special high-tech media devices. The first point to note is that people are more interested in using technical equipment rather than old-fashioned methods of searching certain information. As the 21 century continues to unfold, people give preference to using new innovations. A telling example is a student preferring utilising database search engine instead of the ordinary library catalogue. For many people, including students, which are always in rush with this option is very advantageous. They find book catalogues useless and time-consuming. Despite what has been discussed, the benefits of books ca not be denied. It is an individual choice whether to select books in spite of software. It is undoubtedly all users have different personal characteristics; one might express willingness to read a book in a cozy armchair in the library hall. It is a better way of preventing eyesight deterioration as well. Moreover, some people are not confident computer users. They might be able to work on computers only under librarian’s assistance. One could draw the conclusion that high-tech media has certainly affected our lives. Public libraries should give access to both: books and the software. It is up to person whatever her or she finds more practical and comfortable to utilise.
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that the public libraries should offer the unlimited access to software, videos and DVDs; while others hold that it is
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a waste of money. I tend to
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agree
that public libraries need to
be equipped
with special high-tech media devices.

The
first
point to note is that
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people
are more interested in using technical equipment
rather
than
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old
-fashioned methods of searching certain information. As the
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21 century
continues to unfold,
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people
give preference to using new innovations. A telling example is a student preferring
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utilising
database search engine
instead
of the ordinary library
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catalogue
. For
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many
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people
, including students, which are always in rush with this option is
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very
advantageous. They find
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book
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catalogues
useless and time-consuming.

Despite what has
been discussed
, the benefits of
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books
ca not
be denied
. It is an individual choice whether to select
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books
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in spite of
software. It is
undoubtedly
all users have
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different
personal characteristics; one might express willingness to read a
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book
in a cozy armchair in the library hall.
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It
is a better way of preventing eyesight deterioration
as well
.
Moreover
,
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some
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people
are not confident computer users. They might be able to work on computers
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only
under librarian’s assistance.

One could draw the conclusion that high-tech media has
certainly
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affected
our
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lives
. Public libraries should give access to both:
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books
and the software. It is up to person whatever
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her or
she finds more practical and comfortable to
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utilise
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Public libraries should provide books and not waste their limited resources on expensive high-tech media such as software, videos or DVDs. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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