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Public celeberations such as national days festivals etc are held in most countries These are often quite expensive and some people say that governments should spend money on more useful things Do you agree or disagree v.1

Public celeberations such as national days festivals etc are held in most countries These are often quite expensive and some people say that governments should spend money on more useful things v. 1
Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local languages and, if so, how? A growing number of people opine that studying English slang at the school level as more indispensable than studying other local languages. However, if native languages are not taught at school many of these languages are going to be extinct. This essay will examine with relevant examples in the following paragraphs before drawing a reasonable conclusion. In contemporary society, people are using the English dialect across the world. Especially English plays a vital cog in child's career. For instance, many multi-national companies, call centres, and data centres are providing job offers who are proficient in English. Moreover, if students want to study overseas education before they are flying students are attending many English testing exams like IELTS and TOEFL. Because these exams test student's proficiency levels to what extent they will understand their subject's practical and theoretical knowledge. On the other hand, many other local languages are dying out, but we should try to keep them alive. Because these languages are expressing their native culture and the importance of the jargon. In addition to, at the school stage by conducting some competitions like essay writing, open debate and quiz programs on local famous authors, poets, and the freedom fighters at least we can keep them for a long time further generations. Similarly, local governments should come with certain principles like the compulsory inclusion of native language in their curriculum. In conclusion, it seems to me that in my opinion, especially for people if they want to live in a better world they should have to learn the English jargon and also it ameliorates their growth in career
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for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of
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local
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languages
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, how?

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people
opine that studying English slang at the
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school
level as more indispensable than studying other
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local
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languages
.
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, if native
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languages
are not taught at
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school
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many
of these
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languages
are going to be extinct. This essay will examine with relevant examples in the following paragraphs
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before
drawing a reasonable conclusion.

In contemporary society,
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people
are using the English dialect across the world.
Especially
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many
multi-national
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companies
, call
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centres
, and data
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centres
are providing job offers who are proficient in English.
Moreover
, if students want to study overseas education
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before
they are flying students are attending
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English testing exams like IELTS and TOEFL.
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these exams
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test
student's proficiency levels to what extent they will understand their subject's practical and theoretical knowledge.

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other
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are dying out,
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we should try to
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them alive.
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these
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languages
are expressing their native culture and the importance of the jargon.
In addition
to, at the
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school
stage by conducting
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some
competitions like essay writing, open debate and quiz programs on
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local
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famous
authors, poets, and the freedom fighters at least we can
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keep
them for a long time
further
generations.
Similarly
,
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local
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governments
should
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come
with certain principles like the compulsory inclusion of native
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language
in their curriculum.

In conclusion
, it seems to me that in my opinion,
especially
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people
if they want to
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live
in a better world they should
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have to
learn the English jargon and
also
it ameliorates their growth in career
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
To have another language is to possess a second soul.
Charlemagne

IELTS essay Public celeberations such as national days festivals etc are held in most countries These are often quite expensive and some people say that governments should spend money on more useful things v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
317 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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