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Provide the supporting details needed to develop the examples of Roger's Selfishness

Provide the supporting details needed to develop the examples of Roger's Selfishness kgVkW
My husband Roger is a selfish person. For one thing, he refused to move out of the city, even though it is a bad place to raise the children. We inherited some money when my parents died, and it might be enough for a down payment on a small house in a nearby town. But Roger says he would miss his buddies in the neighborhood. Also, when we go on vacation, we always go where Roger wants to go. Foods that are ordered during the trip are whatever Roger craves. He claimed that he had been working so hard being a breadwinner; therefore, his comfort is above all. Another example of Roger’s selfishness is that he always spends any budget money that is left over. He never buys any gifts for me and our children on our birthday or in any celebrations. However, he wastes a lot of money on clothes. He goes shopping twice a month and then comes home discarding all luxurious shirt which he bought the previous month. Roger believes that clothes which have been worn more than twice are old clothes and are not suitable for a person who usually has to communicate with lots of people like him. On top of that, Roger prefers to put his clothes in mothballs instead of giving away them. Finally, Roger leaves all the work of caring for the children to me. When I had just given birth, our child used to cry a lot at midnight. As appposed to helping me comfort our kid, he customarily flew into a fit of rage and moving to another room to sleep.
My husband Roger is a selfish person. For one thing, he refused to
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move
out of the city,
even though
it is a
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bad
place to raise the children. We inherited
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some
money when my parents
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died
, and it might be
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enough
for a down payment on a
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small
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house
in a nearby town.
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But
Roger says he would miss his buddies in the neighborhood.

Also
, when we go on vacation, we always go where Roger wants to go. Foods that
are ordered
during the trip are whatever Roger craves. He claimed that he had been working
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so
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hard
being a breadwinner;
therefore
, his comfort is
above all
.

Another example of Roger’s selfishness is that he always spends any budget money
that is
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left
over. He never
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buys
any gifts for me and our children on our birthday or in any celebrations.
However
, he wastes
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a lot of
money on
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clothes
. He goes shopping twice a month and then
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comes
home discarding all luxurious shirt which he
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bought
the previous month. Roger believes that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
clothes
which have
been worn
more than twice are
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old
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clothes
and are not suitable for a person who
usually
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has to
communicate with lots of
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people
like him.
On top of that
, Roger prefers to put his
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
clothes
in mothballs
instead
of giving away them.

Finally
, Roger
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leaves
all the work of caring for the children to me. When I had
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just
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given
birth, our child
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used
to cry a lot at midnight. As
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appposed
to helping me comfort our kid, he
customarily
flew into a fit of rage and moving to another room to sleep.
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IELTS essay Provide the supporting details needed to develop the examples of Roger's Selfishness

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
271 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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