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Prompt: Nowadays people rely on social media to get news. Why they do it? Is it a positive or negative trend? v.1

Prompt: Nowadays people rely on social media to get news. Why they do it? Is it a positive or negative trend? v. 1
These days our access to information is greater than ever thanks in large part to our connection to the internet. Many of us use this connectivity to keep abreast of the local and global events via social media. This essay will delve into this phenomenon, elucidating the key reasons why people do this as well as its positive and negative impacts. There is an array of reasons why people turn to social media for their news, but the most obvious ones are speed and convenience. Whereas newspapers require at least a day to produce, given the time and effort needed to write, edit, publish and deliver, apps like Twitter and Facebook can be updated instantly. In this fast-paced world, the ability to have access to the very latest information is compelling. Added to this fact that we carry these apps around on our phones, even on our watches these days, it is clear that digital media news services trump traditional sources. This is especially true for younger generations who are accustomed to receiving everything 'on demand'. Although being informed about what is going on in our world is generally positive, accessing this news via social media can be problematic sometimes. Certainly, as a result of the proliferation of digital devices, people are now much more aware of local and global issues. We can see in real-time, for instance, that traffic is blocked by a protest in our city centre, or that a political party has won an election in another country. The problem, however, is that as social media is getting increasingly personalized, we tend to be served only the news that appeal to us. If you are politically left-wing, you will probably only be encountering stories that suit your beliefs. In this way, we are blocked from engaging with views contrary to ours, which can give rise to intolerance, prejudice and ignorance. In conclusion, people use social media to follow the news because it is an easy way to stay informed about issues that matter to us. While this is valuable, there is also a risk that we see only what the app decides to show us, possibly limiting our view of the world.
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of us
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use
this connectivity to
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keep
abreast of the local and global
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events
via
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social
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media
. This essay will delve into this phenomenon, elucidating the key reasons why
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people
do this
as well
as its
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positive
and
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negative
impacts.

There is an array of reasons why
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people
turn to
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social
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media
for their
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news
,
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but
the most obvious ones
are speed
and convenience. Whereas newspapers require at least a day to produce,
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given
the time and effort needed to write, edit, publish and deliver, apps like Twitter and Facebook can
be updated
instantly
. In this
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fast
-paced world, the ability to have access to the
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very
latest information is compelling.
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Added
to this fact that we carry these apps around on our phones, even on our
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watches
these days, it is
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clear
that digital
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media
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news
services trump traditional sources. This is
especially
true for younger generations who
are accustomed
to receiving everything 'on demand'.

Although
being informed
about what is going on in our world is
generally
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positive
, accessing this
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news
via
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social
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media
can be problematic
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sometimes
.
Certainly
,
as a result
of the proliferation of digital devices,
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people
are
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now
much more aware of local and global issues. We can
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see
in real-time,
for instance
, that traffic
is blocked
by a protest in our city
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centre
, or that a political party has won an election in another country. The problem,
however
, is that as
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social
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media
is getting
increasingly
personalized, we tend to
be served
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only
the
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news
that appeal to us. If you are
politically
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left
-wing, you will
probably
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only
be encountering stories that suit your beliefs. In this way, we
are blocked
from engaging with views contrary to ours, which can give rise to intolerance, prejudice and ignorance.

In conclusion
,
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people
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use
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social
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to follow the
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news
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because
it is an easy way to stay informed about issues that matter to us. While this is valuable, there is
also
a
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risk
that we
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see
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only
what the app decides to
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show
us,
possibly
limiting our view of the world.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Prompt: Nowadays people rely on social media to get news. Why they do it? Is it a positive or negative trend? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
365 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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