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Prohibition of fossil fuel using cars should be realized, instead the ones work with electricity should take their place.

Prohibition of fossil fuel using cars should be realized, instead the ones work with electricity should take their place. WygDW
From my point of view this initiation would result positive changes in the world. There are two main reasons that I want to emphasize. Firstly, electric cars are more eco-friendly than the others. Secondly, there is a risk that resource of fossil fuel will end after a period. Electric cars are environmentally friendly. Utilization of this kind of cars doesn’t yield in production of carbon dioxide which causes global warming that has become one of the biggest problem today. Moreover, if we pay attention to the purity of fossil fuel, we’ll see that some contains other chemicals which will be found in the nature at the end, and no one can assure that they don’t have damages for the nature. Electricity resources are richer than fossil fuels’. Formation of fossil fuels takes billions of years and they will be consumed completely one day, on the contrary electricity is another state of energy, it means electricity can be gotten from different energy sources. For instance by transformation of renewable energies it is feasible to produce electrical energy by some processes which are easier and cheaper than obtaining fossil fuels. To sum up I have good thoughts about this idea. I strongly believe that replacement of fuel cars by electric cars will end up less harm to environment and reduce dependence on fuel.
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changes
in the world. There are two main reasons that I want to emphasize.
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, electric
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cars
are more eco-friendly than the others.
Secondly
, there is a
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risk
that resource of
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fossil
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fuel
will
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end
after a period.

Electric
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cars
are
environmentally
friendly. Utilization of this kind of
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cars
doesn’t yield in production of carbon dioxide which causes global warming that has become one of the biggest problem
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today
.

Moreover
, if we pay attention to the purity of
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fossil
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fuel
, we’ll
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see
that
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some
contains other chemicals which will
be found
in the nature at the
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end
, and no one can assure that they don’t have damages for the nature.

Electricity resources are richer than
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fossil
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fuels’
. Formation of
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fossil
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fuels
takes billions of
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years and
they will
be consumed
completely one day,
on the contrary
electricity is another state of
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, it means electricity can
be gotten
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sources.
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it is feasible to produce electrical
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energy
by
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some
processes which are easier and cheaper than obtaining
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fossil
fuels.

To sum up I have
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good
thoughts about this
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idea
. I
strongly
believe that replacement of
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fuel
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cars
by electric
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cars
will
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end
up less harm to environment and
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reduce
dependence on
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fuel
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IELTS essay Prohibition of fossil fuel using cars should be realized, instead the ones work with electricity should take their place.

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221 words
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