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Private Ownership of fossils.

Private Ownership of fossils. 6xpq8
The passage and the lecture express their views regarding commercialisation of fossils based on viewpoints of public, scientists and possibility of further discoveries. That being said, the author of the passage proposes that commersialisation of fossils have greater harm than benefits for public and scientists, whereas the lecturer presents quite opposite views. As an initial argument, the passage suggests that public suffers great disadvantage from the private ownership of the fossils, as it directly hampers the opportunity for public to see and know about those fossils. However, the orator counters this argument declaring that with the private ownership of the fossils even low level institution can participate in the ownership and fossils can be seen seen easily in schools, as well as in local library. These omnipresent fossils will surely increase the exposure of fossils than making it opaque under museum. Further, the speaker casts doubt in the argument proposed by the author regarding the access of fossils to scientific community. She states that the commercialisation of the fossils follow certain cycle in which first of all it has to be discovered by scientists, then only it will go through value chain process. Therefore, scientists have enough time and first hand acess to these fossils to study and find their significance. Finally, the author in order to prove his argument posists that the commercial fossil will destroy the possibility and evidences of using fossils for scientific findings and discoveries. In contrasts, the lecturer questions the motivation of scientific community towards the discovery of fossils. In addition, she states that if it was not for the commercial fossils and the value they gain, the scientific community as well as university would not have spend this amount of huge resources in excavation and study of the fossils. Therefore, with these specific and concrete counter argument the speaker posists serious doubt on the author's view regarding commercial fossils.
The passage and the lecture express their views regarding
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commercialisation
of
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fossils
based on viewpoints of
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public
,
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scientists
and possibility of
further
discoveries. That
being said
, the author of the passage proposes that
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commersialisation
of
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fossils
have greater harm than benefits for
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public
and
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scientists
, whereas the lecturer presents quite opposite views.

As an initial
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argument
, the passage suggests that
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public
suffers great disadvantage from the private ownership of the
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fossils
, as it
directly
hampers the opportunity for
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public
to
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see
and know about those
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fossils
.
However
, the orator counters this
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argument
declaring that with the private ownership of the
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fossils
even low level institution can participate in the ownership and
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fossils
can be
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seen
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seen
easily
in schools,
as well
as in local library. These omnipresent
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fossils
will
surely
increase the exposure of
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fossils
than making it opaque under museum.

Further
, the speaker casts doubt in the
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argument
proposed by the author regarding the access of
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fossils
to
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scientific
community. She states that the
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commercialisation
of the
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fossils
follow certain cycle in which
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first of all
it
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has to
be discovered
by
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scientists
, then
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only
it will go through value chain process.
Therefore
,
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scientists
have
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enough
time and
first
hand
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acess
to these
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fossils
to study and find their significance.

Finally
, the author in order to prove his
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argument
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posists
that the commercial
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fossil
will
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destroy
the possibility and evidences of using
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fossils
for
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scientific
findings and discoveries. In contrasts, the lecturer questions the motivation of
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scientific
community towards the discovery of
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fossils
.
In addition
, she states that if it was not for the commercial
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fossils
and the value they gain, the
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scientific
community
as well
as university would not have
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spend
this amount of huge resources in excavation and study of the fossils.

Therefore
, with these specific and concrete counter
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argument
the speaker
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posists
serious doubt on the author's view regarding commercial
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fossils
.

IELTS essay Private Ownership of fossils.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
315 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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