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Potrait of Rembrandt

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The author is in complete support of the fact that the painting Potrait of an Elderly Woman in a White Bonnet is not painted by Rembrandt whereas the speaker presents exact contradiction of this view and in fact present evidence to prove that the painting is actually done by Rembrandt. In support for her view, she presented the evidence based upon the dressing sense, light-shadow relation and use of wood panel in Rembrandt paintings. As his/her initial point, the author points out the inconsistency dressing sense of painter which could not be the Rembrandt. In opposition, the speaker diverges from this point with an argument that actually the fur collar was not in the original painting. Instead it was added 100 years after the painting was made by the Rambrandt, to show some aristrocatic look of the lady in the potrait. These points made by the speaker place sufficient cracks to cast doubt on the Author's argument since the original painting shows same attention to details that the Rembrandt will use in his every potrait. Next, the author attempts to prove his point declares the light shadow mismatch in the potrait; nonetheless the lecture counters this position precisely proclaiming that in orginal painting the lady in potrait was wearing light coloured cloth which illuminated light to the face, so when the fur was added in the remaking of the painting, then only it damaged the light-shadow perfection of Rembrandt. Now this evidence cast suspicion on the Author's Position since the original painting was error free and masterpiece of painting light and shadow. Before finishing his/her argument the writer states the final argument that the painting was made on wood panel glued together which Rembrandt never used. The orator again put forward contrasting information that the glued wood panel was only used when the fur collar was added to make the painting grand and huge. However, original painting was made on the single wood panel and it also resembles the wood panel used by Rembrandt to make his self potrait. All in all, despite the significant attempt of writer to convince the audiences that the Potrait of an Elderly Women in a White Bonnet was not the making of Rembrandt, the speaker counter the argument with valid evidences.
The author is in complete support of the fact that the
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painting
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Potrait
of an Elderly Woman in a White Bonnet is not painted by Rembrandt whereas the speaker presents exact contradiction of this view and in fact present
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evidence
to prove that the
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painting
is actually done by Rembrandt. In support for her view, she presented the
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evidence
based upon the dressing sense, light-shadow relation and
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use
of
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wood
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panel
in Rembrandt paintings.

As his/her initial
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point
, the author
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points
out the inconsistency dressing sense of painter which could not be the Rembrandt. In opposition, the speaker diverges from this
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point
with an
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argument
that actually the fur collar was not in the
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original
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painting
.
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Instead
it was
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added
100 years after the
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painting
was made
by the
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Rambrandt
, to
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show
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some
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aristrocatic
look of the lady in the
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potrait
. These
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points
made by the speaker place sufficient cracks to cast doubt on the Author's
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argument
since the
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original
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painting
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shows
same attention to
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details
that the Rembrandt will
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use
in his every
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potrait
.

Next
, the author attempts to prove his
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point
declares the
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light
shadow mismatch in the
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potrait
; nonetheless the lecture counters this position
precisely
proclaiming that in
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orginal
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painting
the lady in
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potrait
was wearing
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light
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coloured
cloth which illuminated
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light
to the face,
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so
when the fur was
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added
in the remaking of the
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painting
, then
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only
it damaged the light-shadow perfection of Rembrandt.
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Now
this
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evidence
cast suspicion on the Author's Position since the
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original
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painting
was error free and masterpiece of
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painting
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light
and shadow.

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Before
finishing his/her
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the writer states the final
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that the
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painting
was made
on
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wood
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panel
glued together which Rembrandt never
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used
. The orator again put forward contrasting information that the glued
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wood
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panel
was
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only
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used
when the fur collar was
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added
to
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make
the
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painting
grand and huge.
However
,
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original
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painting
was made
on the single
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wood
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panel
and it
also
resembles the
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wood
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panel
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used
by Rembrandt to
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make
his self
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potrait
.

All in all, despite the significant attempt of writer to convince the audiences that the
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Potrait
of an Elderly
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in a White Bonnet was not the making of Rembrandt, the speaker counter the
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argument
with valid
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evidences
.
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IELTS essay Potrait of Rembrandt

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
377 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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