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prison is the best punishment for criminlas.

prison is the best punishment for criminlas. 16Yq
Day by day, the number of crimes in the world is increasing significantly. It is traced back to different factors, and there are various ways to punish criminals. Some people believe that prison is an efficient method for criminals, whereas others disagree with this opinion. As far as I am concerned, I agree with the latter point of view. I support my idea by presenting two reasons. In what follows, I will touch upon each of them separately. The first reason that should be taken into account is that jail is so comfortable for some prisoners. For instance, some inmates have access to luxuries such as PC, TV, and sports facilities. It tempts some homeless people to commit a crime intentionally. If prison is going to be an effective way, I believe that it should be tougher. Apart from the first point, I mentioned above, every prisoner has committed different crimes, while they lock up in the same cell. By way of illustration, a shoplifter, a murderer, and a rapist should not be the same cell. They may learn how to commit a serious crime when they are inside. In conclusion, although many people believe that prison is the most effective punishment for a criminal, I think, it is so soft and in a majority of cases is unnecessary. I believe prison should be the last option when all others fail.
Day by day, the number of
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crimes
in the world is increasing
significantly
. It
is traced
back to
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different
factors, and there are various ways to punish criminals.
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Some
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people
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believe
that
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prison
is an efficient method for criminals, whereas others disagree with this opinion. As far as I
am concerned
, I
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agree
with the latter point of view. I support my
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idea
by presenting two reasons. In what follows, I will touch upon each of them
separately
.

The
first
reason that should
be taken
into account is that jail is
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so
comfortable for
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some
prisoners.
For instance
,
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some
inmates have access to luxuries such as PC, TV, and sports facilities. It tempts
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some
homeless
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people
to commit a
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crime
intentionally
. If
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prison
is going to be an effective way, I
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believe
that it should be tougher.

Apart from the
first
point, I mentioned above, every prisoner has committed
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different
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crimes
, while they lock up in the same cell. By way of illustration, a shoplifter, a murderer, and a rapist should not be the same cell. They may learn how to commit a serious
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crime
when they are inside.

In conclusion
, although
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many
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people
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believe
that
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prison
is the most effective punishment for a criminal, I
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think
, it is
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so
soft and in a majority of cases is unnecessary. I
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believe
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prison
should be the last option when all others fail.

IELTS essay prison is the best punishment for criminlas.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
231 words
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