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Findings show that many criminals have low level of education. Some people believe that the best way to reduce crime is to educate criminals in prisons so that they can get job. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Findings show that many criminals have low level of education. Some people believe that the best way to reduce crime is to educate criminals in prisons so that they can get job. v. 1
Any person on earth is entitled to the provision of education. It is henceforth cardinal to illustrate that learning is the key to the human being development in the sense that it helps people to obtain relevant skills and knowledge that can drive the economy of the given country. Therefore, this essay shall agree the view that criminals in prison should get educated for them to get jobs and reduce the number of crimes in the country. Contrary to the above segment, it is very important to notice that criminals in prisons should as well get educated due to the fact that schooling will help them to reason properly about what they can do for them to obtain employment so that they can refrain from committing crimes. Likewise, when criminals get educated, they will be able to understand that committing crimes in the society, is not the best way of sustaining their lives because their minds will be positively opened up to the extent that they will acquire necessary ideas to develop themselves and creates employment when they get educated. Thereby, reducing the chances of committing different crimes in the community. Apart from that studying also helps criminals to establish the foundation of sensitising various communities about the significance of schooling and the effects of committing crimes which will eventually assist youths to concentrate on their studies in order to prevent themselves from committing crimes in the given society. This may finally help youths to always think in the positive way of developing the nation and also get employment, so that unwanted crimes can be often times discouraged. Parallel to the above illustration, when criminals get educated, the chances of them committing crimes becomes slim in the sense that learning will keep them busy searching for employments in order for them to forget about committing crimes after being released from prisons. To recapitulate, education plays a constructive role in changing a human being's life. Therefore, criminals in prison should get educated in order for them to get jobs and concentrate on improving their lives rather than committing crimes in the particular society.
Any person on earth
is entitled
to the provision of education. It is henceforth cardinal to illustrate that learning is the key to the human being development in the sense that it
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helps
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people
to obtain relevant
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skills
and knowledge that can drive the economy of the
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given
country.
Therefore
, this essay shall
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agree
the view that
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criminals
in prison should
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get
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educated
for them to
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get
jobs and
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reduce
the number of
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crimes
in the country.

Contrary to the above segment, it is
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very
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important
to notice that
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criminals
in prisons should
as well
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get
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educated
due to the fact that schooling will
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help
them to reason
properly
about what they can do for them to obtain
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employment
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so
that they can refrain from
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committing
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crimes
.
Likewise
, when
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criminals
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get
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educated
, they will be able to understand that
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committing
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crimes
in the society, is not the best way of sustaining their
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lives
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because
their minds will be
positively
opened up to the extent that they will acquire necessary
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ideas
to develop themselves and creates
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employment
when they
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get
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educated
. Thereby, reducing the chances of
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committing
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different
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crimes
in the community.

Apart from that studying
also
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helps
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criminals
to establish the foundation of
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sensitising
various communities about the significance of schooling and the effects of
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committing
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crimes
which will
eventually
assist youths to concentrate on their studies in order to
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prevent
themselves from
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committing
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crimes
in the
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given
society. This may
finally
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help
youths to always
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think
in the
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positive
way of developing the nation and
also
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get
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employment
,
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so
that unwanted
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crimes
can be
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often
times discouraged.

Parallel to the above illustration, when
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criminals
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get
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educated
, the chances of them
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committing
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crimes
becomes slim in the sense that learning will
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keep
them busy searching for
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employments
in order for them to forget about
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committing
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crimes
after
being released
from prisons.

To recapitulate, education plays a constructive role in changing a human being's life.
Therefore
,
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criminals
in prison should
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get
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educated
in order for them to
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get
jobs and concentrate on improving their
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lives
rather
than
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committing
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crimes
in the particular society.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
38Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Findings show that many criminals have low level of education. Some people believe that the best way to reduce crime is to educate criminals in prisons so that they can get job. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
352 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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