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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic: The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion will be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life. Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. You should write at least 254 words.

Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic: The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion will be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life. Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. nkVg
In a current time, to become the all-rounder is the key to achieve success. To continue in one career through out the life become a very boring nowadays. The new demand is to have various career options to grow their future. Furthermore, to keep up to date knowledge with the different learning methods through the whole life. I agree to have many options to earn the money with the different career options. Firstly, if person have only one career in the engineering than he becomes bore by doing the same work through out his life. In addition, he needs to study M. B. A. or any computer program then person can think of career change in management division. Furthermore, person should enhance their knowledge by adding new information about programming language in computer sector. Such as, if he works in the Java company but he gain some basic skills about Oracle and other multimedia program then he can change the career option in graphics or multimedia sector. Thus, there are many options, how to increase the income! It can be done by doing the secondary job. Secondly, the single career option is old fashion where people complete his job's hour and relax at home. In the past, there were less recession. Children's education were not demanding high fees. Thus, to full fill family requirement is to have various career options. For example, a teacher teaches computer at school, may start a computer programming job as part time. In conclusion, There are a plethora of ways to earn money if people educate themselves with latest technology and enhance their knowledge of creativity. I recommend to all office staff should be educated with latest technology. People should walk with latest trends of career option rather than stick to same career whole life
In a
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current
time, to become the all-rounder is the key to achieve success. To continue in one
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career
Did you mean "throughout"?
through out
the
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life
become a
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very
boring nowadays. The new demand is to have various
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career
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options
to grow their future.
Furthermore
, to
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keep
up to date knowledge with the
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different
learning methods through the whole
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life
. I
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agree
to have
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many
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options
to earn the money with the
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different
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career
options.

Firstly
, if person have
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only
one
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career
in the engineering than he becomes bore by doing the same work
Did you mean "throughout"?
through out
his
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life
.
In addition
, he needs to study M. B. A. or any computer program then person can
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think
of
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career
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
in management division.

Furthermore
, person should enhance their knowledge by adding new information about programming language in computer sector. Such as, if he works in the Java
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company
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but
he
The pronoun 'he' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "gains", "gained".
gain
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some
basic
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skills
about Oracle and other multimedia program then he can
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change
the
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career
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option
in graphics or multimedia sector.
Thus
, there are
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many
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options
, how to increase the income! It can
be done
by doing the secondary job.

Secondly
, the single
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career
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option
is
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old
fashion where
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people
complete his job's hour and relax at home. In the past, there were less recession. Children's education were
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not


This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
demanding
high fees.
Thus
, to full fill family requirement is to have various
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
career
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
options
.
For example
, a teacher teaches computer at school, may
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
a computer programming job as
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
part time
.

In conclusion
, There are a plethora of ways to earn money if
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
educate themselves with
A determiner is probably missing here: "the latest".
latest
technology and enhance their knowledge of creativity. I recommend to all office staff should
be educated
with
A determiner is probably missing here: "the latest".
latest
technology.
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People
should walk with
A determiner is probably missing here: "the latest".
latest
trends of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
career
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
option
rather
than stick to same
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
career
whole
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
life
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IELTS essay Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic: The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion will be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life. Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
299 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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