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In this day and age, a lot of impressive buildings and enormous architectures are constructed in many countries. While the government is investing in large buildings, I believe that hospitals and schools are very essential to develop and need more attention from the authorities. First and foremost, a convincing reason to construct large, impressive buildings is that these buildings perform multiple functions brings many benefits for people. It's able to include residential areas, shopping centres and offices in one large and tall buildings. For example, everyone thinks it’s very convenient because you don’t need to spend about 30 minutes to go the supermarket, now it's in the same place as where you live. Moreover, these buildings are a part of the nation’s culture and a reflection of the country’s prosperity. When you visit any country, you notice the building that stands out, you are willing to spend money to see it. This brings income to local citizens. However, the government must also make sure that their citizens are looked after. Improving schools and hospitals are good choices to invest money. Improving hospitals can guarantee social welfare, which helps to maintain social and political stability and pave the way for developing economy. Similarly, if citizens don’t have enough healthcare, they can’t work and serve their country. It makes the countries increasingly downward. The last issue worth mentioning is that investment in education is the key to a civilized society. For example, if schools provide qualified education it will increase knowledge and literacy rate. Furthermore, citizens are able to find well-paying jobs to develop the economy and crime rate decreases. In conclusion, I think that both views are relevant. While some large, impressive buildings for a city should be built, the authorities should also spend money on improving health care systems and education.
In this day and age,
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a lot of
impressive
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buildings
and enormous architectures
are constructed
in
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many
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countries
. While the
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government
is investing in
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large
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buildings
, I believe that hospitals and schools are
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very
essential to develop and need more attention from the authorities.

First
and foremost, a convincing reason to construct
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large
, impressive
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buildings
is that these
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buildings
perform multiple functions brings
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many
benefits for
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people
. It's able to include residential areas, shopping
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centres
and offices in one
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large
and tall
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buildings
.
For example
, everyone
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thinks
it’s
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very
convenient
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because
you don’t need to spend about 30 minutes to go the supermarket,
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now
it's in the same place as where you
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live
.
Moreover
, these
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buildings
are a part of the nation’s culture and a reflection of the
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country’s
prosperity. When you visit any
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country
, you notice the
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building
that stands out, you are willing to spend money to
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see
it. This brings income to local citizens.

However
, the
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government
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must
also
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make
sure that their citizens
are looked
after. Improving schools and hospitals are
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good
choices to invest money. Improving hospitals can guarantee social welfare, which
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helps
to maintain social and political stability and pave the way for developing economy.
Similarly
, if citizens don’t have
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enough
healthcare, they can’t work and serve their
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country
. It
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makes
the
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countries
increasingly
downward. The last issue worth mentioning is that investment in education is the key to a civilized society.
For example
, if schools provide qualified education it will increase knowledge and literacy rate.
Furthermore
, citizens are able to find well-paying jobs to develop the economy and crime rate decreases.

In conclusion
, I
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think
that both views are relevant. While
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some
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large
, impressive
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buildings
for a city should
be built
, the authorities should
also
spend money on improving health care systems and education.
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IELTS essay Wringt 5 with something to say

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
301 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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