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We can not help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?

We can not help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries. with this statement? XLEE
It is true that we are living in a global village. Every country of the world is connected to each other and every individual has a role to play in the society. Some people think that one cannot help everyone in the society who is in need. Therefore, people should only show the concern to the inhabitants of his own country and community. I completely disagree with the statement for the following reason. Firstly, every nation today is interdependent on each other. Though, some nations are wealthier than others or require their basic needs for food, clothing and shelter to be fulfilled. According to me, countries that are well to do can help poorer countries to overcome their poverty. For example, some developing nations that had faced natural calamity require financial help to raise their economy. This is possible when another country is willing to do so. This not only provides support to affected country but also helps to develop international relationships and thus can enhance international trade. Furthermore, many countries like India face problems of unemployment. Other developed nations can resolve this problem by providing job opportunity to the immigrants. These can be achieved in their country to be served by some skilful individuals which, thereby, affects the economic development of the country. Above all, we all are human beings and inhabitants of this wonderful planet, Earth. We all share the same biology. Therefore, it is needless to say that all should be helpful to each other. Humans make the world and humanity should make a better society. Today many worldwide organizations have been formed to sponsor people of different countries or in need. For instance, World Vision, an Australian organization that sponsors children in different countries so that they can receive a better education and lead a healthy and prosperous life. To conclude, I believe that everyone in the world is capable of helping others by some way or the other. Therefore, the statement about concerning with only own community and country is questionable.
It is true that we are living in a global village. Every
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country
of the
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world
is connected
to each
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other
and every individual has a role to play in the society.
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people
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think
that one cannot
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help
everyone in the society who is in need.
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,
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people
should
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only
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show
the concern to the inhabitants of his
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own
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country
and community. I completely disagree with the statement for the following reason.

Firstly
, every
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nation
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today
is interdependent on each
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other
. Though,
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some
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nations
are wealthier than others or require their basic needs for food, clothing and shelter to
be fulfilled
.
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According to me
,
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countries
that are
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well to do
can
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help
poorer
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countries
to overcome their poverty.
For example
,
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some
developing
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nations
that had faced natural calamity require financial
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help
to raise their economy. This is possible when another
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country
is willing to do
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so
. This not
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only
provides support to
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affected
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country
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but
also
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helps
to develop international relationships and
thus
can enhance international trade.
Furthermore
,
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many
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countries
like India face problems of unemployment.
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Other
developed
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nations
can resolve this problem by providing job opportunity to the immigrants. These can
be achieved
in their
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country
to
be served
by
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some
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skilful
individuals which, thereby, affects the economic development of the country.

Above all
, we all are human beings and inhabitants of this wonderful planet, Earth. We all share the same biology.
Therefore
, it is needless to say that all should be helpful to each
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other
. Humans
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make
the
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world
and humanity should
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make
a better society.
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Today
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many
worldwide organizations have
been formed
to sponsor
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people
of
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different
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countries
or in need.
For instance
,
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World
Vision, an Australian organization that sponsors children in
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different
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countries
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so
that they can receive a better education and lead a healthy and prosperous life.

To conclude
, I believe that everyone in the
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world
is capable of helping others by
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some
way or the
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other
.
Therefore
, the statement about concerning with
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only
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own
community and
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country
is questionable.
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IELTS essay We can not help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries. with this statement?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
336 words
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