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poverty is no shame. Don't let poverty defeat you

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Poverty is no shame By Thu Ha Published: 06: 00 GMT, 20 September My parents died in a traffic accident when I was ten years old, so I grew up with my grandmother who was too old and weak to work. I had to leave school and did odd jobs to earn a living: selling lottery tickets, washing dishes, and doing babysitting. When I was 15, my grandma encouraged me to attend evening classes, so I could improve my literacy and job prospects. After lots of hardship and effort, I completed secondary education and passed a challenging exam to enter Medical University, which is the dream of many students. However, I could not pay the tuition fees and had to reject the offer. The door to a new life was closed before me. I was completely disappointed and saw only gloomy days ahead. Then something incredible happened: I was awarded a scholarship from The Thanh Nien for college students from poor families. This was a turning point in my life because I could start my university studies and hope for a better future. Six years of hard work at the university and of trying to live on a very tight budget came to an end at last. Now I am working as a doctor at a hospital, but I will never forget those difficult days. I am planning to set up and run a charitable organization to help poor students, as a way to acknowledge other people for supporting me. I've told my own story hoping to encourage other people like me to overcome hard times. Don't let poverty defeat you and destroy your hopes for a better future. This is my motto.
Poverty is no shame

By Thu Ha

Published: 06: 00 GMT, 20 September

My parents
died
in a traffic accident when I was ten years
old
,
so
I grew up with my grandmother who was too
old
and weak to work. I had to
leave
school and did odd jobs to earn a living: selling lottery tickets, washing dishes, and
doing babysitting
. When I was 15, my grandma encouraged me to attend evening classes,
so
I could
improve
my literacy and job prospects.

After lots of hardship and effort, I completed secondary education and passed a challenging exam to enter Medical University, which is the dream of
many
students.
However
, I could not pay the tuition fees and had to reject the offer. The door to a new life
was closed
before
me. I was completely disappointed and
saw
only
gloomy days ahead. Then something incredible happened: I
was awarded
a scholarship from The Thanh
Nien
for college students from poor families. This was a turning point in my life
because
I could
start
my university studies and hope for a better future.

Six years of
hard
work at the university and of trying to
live
on a
very
tight budget came to an
end
at last.
Now
I am working as a doctor at a hospital,
but
I will never forget those difficult days. I am planning to set up and run a charitable organization to
help
poor students, as a way to acknowledge other
people
for supporting me.

I've
told
my
own
story hoping to encourage other
people
like me to overcome
hard
times. Don't
let
poverty defeat you and
destroy
your hopes for a better future. This is my motto.
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IELTS essay poverty is no shame. Don't let poverty defeat you

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
283 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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