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Popular hobbies and interests change over time and are more a reflection of trends and fashions than an indication of what individuals really want to do in their spare time. v.8

Popular hobbies and interests change over time and are more a reflection of trends and fashions than an indication of what individuals really want to do in their spare time. v. 8
It is true that people's hobbies and interests change in accordance with the latest trends and fashions. They are following these hobbies and interest for the sake of popularity, not for personal pleasure. To a certain extent, I would agree with the statements, but there are some new hobbies which people follow due they like the activity. On the one hand, many people change their hobbies for popularity purpose. People follow and do popular activities to show that they exist and up to date with the latest trends. But In the reality, they do not have the passion in doing it. For example, mountain biking has become a popular activity in Indonesia lately, and many people are following it. While some of them do mountain biking due to they like the sport, others are doing it to show that they are following the current trend and to show that they have the latest model of the bicycle. On the other hand, there are few other people who change their interests and hobbies due to the fact that they like these new activities. These new hobbies might be the latest trend, but these people change their interest because they have such huge passion in these activities. Besides that, these hobbies might be newly invented, therefore no one was doing these hobbies in the past. In conclusion, it is a fact that people's hobbies and interest sometimes changes. To a certain point, I agree that some people change their hobbies due to following the trend, but there are others who change their interest due to they like the new activity. I personally believe that hobby is a personal matter, and we should not follow what is popular in public and should do things that we really like.
It is true that
people
's
hobbies
and
interests
change
in accordance with the latest
trends
and fashions. They are
following
these
hobbies
and
interest for
the sake of popularity, not for personal pleasure. To a certain extent, I would
agree
with the statements,
but
there are
some
new
hobbies
which
people
follow
due
they like the activity.

On the one hand,
many
people
change
their
hobbies
for popularity purpose.
People
follow and do popular
activities
to
show
that they exist and up to date with the latest
trends
.
But
In the reality, they do not have the passion in doing it.
For example
, mountain biking has become a popular
activity
in Indonesia lately, and
many
people
are
following
it. While
some
of them do mountain biking
due
to they like the sport, others are doing it to
show
that they are
following
the
current
trend
and to
show
that they have the latest model of the bicycle.

On the
other
hand, there are few
other
people
who
change
their
interests
and
hobbies
due
to the fact that they like these
new
activities
. These
new
hobbies
might be the latest
trend
,
but
these
people
change
their
interest
because
they have such huge passion in these
activities
.
Besides
that, these
hobbies
might be
newly
invented,
therefore
no one was doing these
hobbies
in the past.

In conclusion
, it is a fact that
people
's
hobbies
and
interest
sometimes
changes
. To a certain point, I
agree
that
some
people
change
their
hobbies
due
to
following
the
trend
,
but
there are others who
change
their
interest
due
to they like the
new
activity
. I
personally
believe that
hobby
is a personal matter, and we should not follow what is popular in public and should do things that we
really
like.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
56Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Popular hobbies and interests change over time and are more a reflection of trends and fashions than an indication of what individuals really want to do in their spare time. v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
295 words
6.0
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