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Popular events like the football World Cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Popular events like the football World Cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. with this opinion? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. aabY
Nowadays, football is the most popular game in the world. We can find there are many different teams who plays this football. There are dividing into 3 division: division one, division two and division three. Each divisions have different skills. The skills that they have are depend on the manager. He is the one who teachs the player how to play. By playing football, there are many advantages and disadvantages. Firstly, the team can earn a lot. If we compare the income in division one and division two are really different. The division one will get more than division two. Because as we know, the team in division one, they shows to the people that they are able to play better than the others. For example: David Beckham (the player of Manchaster United). He can earn for about £45. 000 £50. 000/week. It’s unbelievable. Even the prime minister in the UK just got for about£11O. OOO/year. Secondly, they can get a lot of spectators which makes the income increased. In one match, they can earn for about 20 or 30 million pounds. Actually, it’s really high. For one ticket (VIP) it can cost us a lot of money. I think for about £100 or over. That is for one person. How if we count for a million person? There are also many disadvantages: like from the task which says that the releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. Actually, I don’t really agree about that: like 2 weeks or 3 weeks ago, there are 2 fans of Leeds United got shots. And it makes them died. Many people come and give them flowers and also the clothes which shown they’re sad about that. There are other sport games like tennis. Tennis is also popular. In playing tennis there are also have advantages and disadvantages. This games shows how they against each other. The advantages are can earn a lot of money, can attract the spectators (audience). There are also have disadvantages of this games, for example: two years ago, when Monica Sales and Steffi Graph are on the match. They play against each other then, one of the Steffi’s fan can’t stand anymore, he killed (shots) Monica Sales. That makes Monica Sales have to stop the game. The people are all thinking to take her to the hospital. Because of that, it makes Monica Sales stopped from playing tennis for about a year. But now, she has started again. In my opinion, these sport can ease the international tensions and also can makedeath from year to year become increase. So, it is very dangerous.
Nowadays, football is the most popular game in the world. We can find there are
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plays
this football. There are dividing into 3
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division
:
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division
one,
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two and
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division
three.
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divisions
have
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skills
. The
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skills
that they have are
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depend
on the manager. He is the one who
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teachs
the player how to
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play
. By playing football, there are
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many
advantages and disadvantages.
Firstly
, the team can
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earn
a
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lot
. If we compare the income in
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division
one and
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division
two are
really
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different
. The
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division
one will
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get
more than
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division
two.
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as we know, the team in
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division
one, they
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shows
to the
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people
that they are able to
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play
better than the others.
For example
: David Beckham (the player of
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Manchaster
United). He can
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earn
for about £45.
The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: "£000".
000 £
50. 000/week. It’s unbelievable. Even the prime minister in the UK
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got
for about£11O.
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OOO
/year.
Secondly
, they can
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get
a
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lot
of spectators which
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makes
the income increased. In one match, they can
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earn
for about 20 or 30 million pounds. Actually, it’s
really
high. For one ticket (VIP) it can cost us a
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lot
of money. I
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think
for about £100 or over.
That is
for one person. How if we count for a million person? There are
also
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disadvantages: like from the task which says that the releasing patriotic emotions
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in a safe way
. Actually, I don’t
really
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agree
about that: like 2 weeks or 3 weeks ago, there are 2 fans of Leeds United
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got
shots. And it
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makes
them
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died
.
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people
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come
and give them flowers and
also
the clothes which shown they’re sad about that.

There are
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other
sport
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games
like tennis. Tennis is
also
popular. In playing tennis there are
also
have advantages and disadvantages. This
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games
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shows
how they against each
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other
. The advantages are can
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earn
a
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lot
of money, can attract the spectators (audience). There are
also
have disadvantages of
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this
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games
,
for example
: two years ago, when

Monica
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Sales
and
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Steffi
Graph are on the match. They
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play
against each
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other then
, one of the
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Steffi
’s fan can’t stand anymore, he killed (shots) Monica
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Sales
. That
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makes
Monica
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Sales
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have to
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stop
the game. The
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people
are all thinking to take her to the hospital.
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of that, it
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makes
Monica
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Sales
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stopped
from playing tennis for about a
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year
.
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now
, she has
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started
again.

In my opinion, these sport can
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ease
the international tensions and
also
can
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makedeath
from
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year
to
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year
become increase.
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, it is
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IELTS essay Popular events like the football World Cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. with this opinion? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
434 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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