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Popular events like the football World Cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and realising patriotic emotions in a safe way. To what extend do you agree and disagree.

Popular events like the football World Cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and realising patriotic emotions in a safe way. Py7J
There is no doubt that sports events always give feeling proud to respective countries. So, there are various renowned games such as cricket, football, hockey and more international sport events which give pleasure and express patriotism feeling towards nation. This essay will discuss as to why this sports events are essential and provide support view on how people feel about this occasion. To begin with, when two team compete with each other in Olympics then not only represent their own countries but also make strong bond between them. For example, when one team come for playing in particualar nation. Then those country show the hospitality towards players and audience and provide secure vibes. Like India and Pakistan who has lots of conflicts between them but during match they forget all issues and focus on their play. In short, sports play crucial role to reduce barrier among nations. Moreover, in order to get more progressing of country, several nations invite to other overseas resident to participate in different sports. As a result, they can show their talent and passion as well skills of sportsman. Along with, learn other culture and tradition and also show their rituals of country. In conclusion, in order to get amusement and cheerfulness, sports events only one main format which make people more close with other nations and feel patriotic either playing and watching in field.
There is no doubt that
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sports
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events
always give feeling proud to respective
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countries
.
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So
, there are various renowned games such as cricket, football, hockey and more international
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sport
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events
which give pleasure and express patriotism feeling towards
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nation
. This essay will discuss as to why this
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sports
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events
are essential and provide support view on how
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people
feel about this occasion. To
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begin
with, when two team compete with each
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other
in Olympics then not
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only
represent their
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own
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countries
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but
also
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make
strong bond between them.
For example
, when one team
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come
for playing in
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particualar
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nation
. Then those
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country
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show
the hospitality towards players and audience and provide secure vibes. Like India and Pakistan who has lots of conflicts between them
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but
during match they forget all issues and focus on their play. In short,
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sports
play crucial role to
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reduce
barrier among
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nations
.
Moreover
, in order to
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get
more progressing of
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country
, several
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nations
invite to
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other
overseas resident to participate in
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different
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sports
.
As a result
, they can
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show
their talent and passion
as well
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skills
of sportsman. Along with, learn
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other
culture and tradition and
also
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show
their rituals of
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country
.
In conclusion
, in order to
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get
amusement and cheerfulness,
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sports
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events
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only
one main format which
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make
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people
more close with
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other
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nations
and feel patriotic either playing and watching in field.
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IELTS essay Popular events like the football World Cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and realising patriotic emotions in a safe way.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
229 words
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