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Pollution of rivers, lakes and seas is a major concern for people who seek to protect the environment.

Pollution of rivers, lakes and seas is a major concern for people who seek to protect the environment. q76d
The pollution of ponds, rivers and seas is a big problem for people who worried about the environment. This Problem have several causes ans effects that I will disscuse about them in this essay. Firstly, some factories are not concern about environment and they polluted seas, rivers and lakes by release their trashes in the nature waters. Secondly, some people who spend their weekend in the nature are leave their trashes in the seas or rivers and in the long times this nature converted to a land fill. Finally, the most important thing in this disaster is the effects of these acts on animals life and our society. In this natural water a lot of animals are living and the water pullution affects on their lives directly, they surronded by a lot of trashes and their eco system is converted to a land fill, they eat plastics and dirty water, so finaly they will kill by our mistakes. On the other hand the pulluted waters make toxic gas and we breath it and it will harmful for us. Last year I read a essay about this problem in a magazin, it described the effects of pulluted water by oil on our foods. In this essay some scentists compared the amount of harmful chemicals were exist in 100 grams of fish meats which were grew in the pulluted water and in the fresh water. They mentioned 10 grams of their meats are affected by toxic materials and it will be harmful for people who eat this meats. In conclusion if we dont worry about our environment, in near future we have to face with some illness like cancer and also we will destroy our nature.
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big
problem for
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people
who worried about the environment.
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This Problem have
several
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causes
ans effects that I will
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disscuse
about them in this essay.

Firstly
,
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factories are not concern about
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environment and
they polluted seas, rivers and lakes by release their trashes in the
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nature
waters.

Secondly
,
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some
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people
who spend their weekend in the
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nature
are
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leave
their trashes in the seas or rivers and in the long times this
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nature
converted to a land fill.

Finally
, the most
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important
thing in this disaster is the effects of these acts on animals life and our society. In this natural
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water
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a lot of
animals are living and the
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water
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pullution
affects on their
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lives
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, they
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surronded
by
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a lot of
trashes and their
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eco system
is converted
to a land fill, they eat plastics and dirty
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water
,
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so
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finaly
they will kill by our mistakes.
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the
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pulluted
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waters
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make
toxic
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gas and
we
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breath
it and it
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will harmful
for us.

Last year I read
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a
essay about this problem in a
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magazin
, it
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described
the effects of
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pulluted
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water
by oil on our foods.

In this essay
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some
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scentists
compared the amount of harmful chemicals were
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exist
in 100 grams of fish meats which were
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grew
in the
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pulluted
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water
and in the fresh water.

They mentioned 10 grams of their meats are
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affected
by toxic materials and it will be harmful for
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people
who eat
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this
meats.

In conclusion
if we
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dont
worry about our environment, in near future we
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have to
face with
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some
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illness
like cancer and
also
we will
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destroy
our
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nature
.
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IELTS essay Pollution of rivers, lakes and seas is a major concern for people who seek to protect the environment.

Essay
  American English
8 paragraphs
284 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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