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Plastic shopping bags are used widely and cause many environmental problems. Some people say they should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

Plastic shopping bags are used widely and cause many environmental problems. Some people say they should be banned. v. 2
Nowadays, we usually hear a phrase that "internet makes whoever is far away seems near, and whoever is near feels so far". By this essay, I agree with the statement that internet could actually give us barrier to socialise in the real world, even though internet plays an important role in human everyday life. It is because the impact of the social media that makes us be able to reach anyone, wherever they are, but sometimes we tend to forget the person that is standing in front of us caused by our over-attention to our phones. In fact, there are several cases that people usually being too excited on their phone and makes them forget about their real world. For example, from my experiences, when it comes to a family gathering, I can see many family members opened their phone in a long time, ignored others, and got lack of focus in one moment. This could bring any negative feeling such as isolation, not being respected, and can bring tension from one person to another. Nevertheless, we can't argue to ban internet because it is really important for people to do several beneficial behaviour, for instance like doing business, studying, and many more. We can also easily chatting with friends inside and outside our country, connected with the news of the world, and gathered information. The conclusion is, we have to use internet wisely. By managing time in online platform, not playing phone when in front of others, and avoiding misleading information, these behaviours could lead an effective and a wise way to use internet.
Nowadays, we
usually
hear a phrase that
"
internet
makes
whoever is far away seems near, and whoever is near feels
so
far
"
. By this essay, I
agree
with the statement that internet could actually give us barrier to
socialise
in the real world,
even though
internet plays an
important
role in human everyday life. It is
because
the impact of the social media that
makes
us be able to reach anyone, wherever they are,
but
sometimes
we tend to forget the person
that is
standing in front of us caused by our over-attention to our phones.

In fact, there are several cases that
people
usually
being too excited on their phone and
makes
them forget about their real world.
For example
, from my experiences, when it
comes
to a family gathering, I can
see
many
family members opened their phone in a long time,
ignored
others, and
got
lack of
focus in
one moment. This could bring any
negative
feeling such as isolation, not
being respected
, and can bring tension from one person to another.

Nevertheless
, we can't argue to ban internet
because
it is
really
important
for
people
to do several beneficial
behaviour
,
for instance
like doing business, studying, and
many
more. We can
also
easily
chatting with friends inside and outside our country, connected with the news of the world, and gathered information.

The conclusion is, we
have to
use
internet
wisely
. By managing time in online platform, not playing phone when in front of others, and avoiding misleading information, these
behaviours
could lead an effective and a wise way to
use
internet.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Plastic shopping bags are used widely and cause many environmental problems. Some people say they should be banned. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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