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Planting trees is very important for the environment. Some people says that trees should be planted in the vacant areas of cities and towns, while other says housing facilities should be build instead. Do you agree or disagree? v.5

Planting trees is very important for the environment. Some people says that trees should be planted in the vacant areas of cities and towns, while other says housing facilities should be build instead. v. 5
The issue whether the urban areas should be endowed with some greenery or housing, amenities is certainly a contentious one. Although enhancement in infrastructure would revolutionize the lifestyles of the population, I firmly believe that forestation could be far more beneficial against air pollution as well as flourishing attractiveness of a state. On the one hand, the key upside that reforestation could usher is much less air contamination. To illustrate, given the fact that scarcity of trees in municipal areas could be held responsible for deterioration of air quality, the more trees are implanted, the more oxygen will be released. Therefore, such several states as USA, CHina and most European countries, suffering from air pollution by virtue of their deleterious industrial emissions, have been making an effort to evolve, eco-tourism with an eye to enjoy the more bracing air and green beauty. Furthermore, residents of polluted states are tendencies to pay a visit to spots with more greenery and naturally stunning scenes, which can also bring more profit to the local budget. Hence, because of trees' both environmental and economic value, governments should also be stimulated to implant trees as much as possible, not only to improve infrastructure. On the other hand, if officials direct their investment and attention into housing facilities, it might bring improvement in the way people live. This is because the modernisation of public utilities or expansion of recreational spots could minimize health issues and the levels of stress amid the dwellers, providing them with modern life. For instance, if administrations put emphasis on housing facilities, the homeless, being amongst the contributory factor to the spread of the severe diseases, will be supplied with housing estates in tandem with certain occupations. Consequently, the crime alongside redundancy ratings would decline, which can make an enormous difference in overall development of the community. Nonetheless, as a result of the dearth of trees and fragrant flowers, it is highly likely the housing amenities will lose their significance. In conclusion, albeit merits of less unemployment levels and health problems, it is my conviction that implementation of trees could obviate such grave eco-issues as worsening of air quality.
The issue whether the urban areas should
be endowed
with
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
greenery or housing, amenities is
certainly
a contentious one. Although enhancement in infrastructure would revolutionize the lifestyles of the population, I
firmly
believe that forestation could be far more beneficial against
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
air
pollution
as well
as flourishing attractiveness of a state.

On the one hand, the key upside that reforestation could usher is much less
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air
contamination. To illustrate,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
the fact that scarcity of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trees
in municipal areas could
be held
responsible for deterioration of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
air
quality, the more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trees
are implanted
, the more oxygen will
be released
.
Therefore
, such several states
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as USA
,
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CHina
and most European countries, suffering from
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air
pollution by virtue of their deleterious industrial emissions, have been making an effort to evolve,
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eco-tourism
with an eye to enjoy the more bracing
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air
and green beauty.
Furthermore
, residents of polluted states are tendencies to pay a visit to spots with more greenery and
naturally
stunning scenes, which can
also
bring more profit to the local budget.
Hence
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of trees' both environmental and economic value,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
should
also
be stimulated
to implant
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trees
as much as possible, not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
infrastructure.

On the other hand
, if officials direct their investment and attention into housing facilities, it might bring improvement in the way
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
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live
. This is
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because
the
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modernisation
of public utilities or expansion of recreational spots could minimize health issues and the levels of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
amid the dwellers, providing them with modern life.
For instance
, if administrations put emphasis on housing facilities, the homeless, being amongst the contributory factor to the spread of the severe diseases, will
be supplied
with housing estates in tandem with certain occupations.
Consequently
, the crime alongside redundancy ratings would decline, which can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
an enormous difference in
overall
development of the community. Nonetheless,
as a result
of the dearth of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trees
and fragrant flowers, it is
highly
likely the housing amenities will lose their significance.

In conclusion
, albeit merits of less unemployment levels and health problems, it is my conviction that implementation of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trees
could obviate such grave
Possible spelling mistake found.
eco-issues
as worsening of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
air
quality.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Planting trees is very important for the environment. Some people says that trees should be planted in the vacant areas of cities and towns, while other says housing facilities should be build instead. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
357 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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