Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Pike Royal Commission case study

Pike Royal Commission case study Vw0xA
An explosion, caused by the ignition of methane gas in a New Zealand underground mine operated by Pike River Coal Ltd (Pike), a company part-owned by New Zealand Oil & Gas Ltd (NZOG), killed 29 workers on 19 November 2010. The Royal Commission on the Pike River Coal Mine Tragedy uncovered systemic failures in Pike’s health and safety protocols, caused by Pike’s undue focus on appeasing its shareholders. Unfortunately, the company’s culture of profit before safety led to signals of danger being ignored, with an example being the failure to report flammable range methane gas readings, in the month before the explosion, to the Department of Labour (DOL). The Royal Commission also determined that the unusual design of the mine’s ventilation system “could compromise the survival chances for anyone underground”, particularly as any “malfunction of the fan or its motor can be a source of ignition” and that the mine lacked a second egress. Furthermore, Pike lacked the necessary resources and staff to provide workers with training in safe mining techniques. The Royal Commission states that Pike was required by the Health and Safety in Employment Act 1992 (HSE Act) to “take all practicable steps to ensure that no employee, contractor or subcontractor was harmed while working”. Pike had breached the HSE Act on multiple occasions. Furthermore, it acted unethically by exploiting ambiguities in workplace safety legislation. The Royal Commission identified that it was recognised by the DOL’s health and safety inspector that the installation of an underground fan “would give rise to more hazards than a surface installation”. However, the inspector was unable to prevent Pike from installing the fan because legislation did not forbid such a practice. By proceeding with the fan installation, Pike demonstrated that it perceived worker safety to be secondary to the happiness of its shareholders.
An explosion, caused by the ignition of methane gas in a New Zealand underground
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
mine
operated by Pike River Coal Ltd (Pike), a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
part-
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
owned
by New Zealand Oil & Gas Ltd (
Possible spelling mistake found.
NZOG
), killed 29 workers on 19 November 2010. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Royal
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Commission
on the Pike River Coal
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Mine
Tragedy uncovered systemic failures in Pike’s health and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
safety
protocols, caused by Pike’s undue focus on appeasing its shareholders.

Unfortunately, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
’s culture of profit
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
safety
led to signals of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
danger
being
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ignored
, with an example being the failure to report flammable range methane gas readings, in the month
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
the explosion, to the Department of
Possible spelling mistake. 'Labour' is British English.
Labour
(DOL). The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Royal
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Commission
also
determined that the unusual design of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
mine’s
ventilation system “could compromise the survival chances for anyone underground”,
particularly
as any “malfunction of the fan or its motor can be a source of ignition” and that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
mine
lacked a second egress.
Furthermore
, Pike lacked the necessary resources and staff to provide workers with training in safe mining techniques.

The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Royal
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Commission
states that Pike
was required
by the Health and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Safety
in Employment Act 1992 (HSE Act) to “take all practicable steps to ensure that no employee, contractor or subcontractor
was harmed
while working”. Pike had breached the HSE Act on multiple occasions.
Furthermore
, it acted
unethically
by exploiting ambiguities in workplace
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
safety
legislation. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Royal
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Commission
identified that it was
Possible spelling mistake. 'recognised' is British English.
recognised
by the DOL’s health and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
safety
inspector that the installation of an underground fan “would give rise to more hazards than a surface installation”.
However
, the inspector was unable to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
Pike from installing the fan
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
legislation did not forbid such a practice. By proceeding with the fan installation, Pike demonstrated that it perceived worker
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
safety
to be secondary to the happiness of its shareholders.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay Pike Royal Commission case study

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
301 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts
  • 5band
    It is argued that we should replace police enforcement with technologies in crime prevention and solving cases.
    Although technologies and machines are being smarter every day with new abilities and features to help us in crime invention, the police are always an effective tool to stop crimes. It is argued that we should replace police enforcement with technologies in crime prevention and solving cases. This e...
  • 6band
    describe the scene and atmosphere of a theme park
    The feeling of excitement, it tingling inside your heart nonstop, that was how I felt when I was first visiting a theme park with my family. Although this had happened for quite some time, but i can still remember everything so vividly, it was spring back then, everything was so vibrant and jubilant...
  • 6band
    Tourism is a double-edged sword.
    There is no doubt that tourism has now become more and more growing. Many people hold the view that tourism is a double-edged sword since this trend has both advantages and disadvantages. Personally, I totally agree with this opinion and this essay may discuss the positive and negative effects that ...
  • 5band
    Describe your plan for one of your upcoming working days.
    Friday is always my busiest day. In the morning, I do my homework or study via youtube. When it's 10 o'clock, I have to cook lunch for my family. When the meal is over, my brother will wash the dishes while I will clean up the leftovers. After that, in the afternoon, I have class and extra lessons. ...
  • 5band
    Should children be famous at a young age? agree or disagree
    Nowadays, an argument held by many people is that children children should not become famous when they were young. This theme is widely considered as a topic of concern for the whole society. However, from my point of view, I am totally convinced that it has remarkable advantages which help much mor...
  • 5band
    Everyone should become vegetarian they do not eat meat for healthy diet. Agree/ Disagree
    Many people chooses to eat plant foods for healthy diet. However, some people choose eat chickens for healthy diet. Everyone has their own pros and cons: I shall discussed both meat and vegetables benifits for people in this essay. On the one hand eat healthy vegetables for healthy diet it becomes ...