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Physical education. Yes or No?

Physical education. Yes or No? 8ag3l
There are different opinions about education all around the world. This can be explained by differences in traditions, culture and country needs. Indeed, many people claim that the balance between academic classes and physical education can never be the same. Nowadays, obesity is on the rise and studies affirm that children are up to 40 per cent less active than they were twenty years ago. Lack of safe places for children to play outside and too much time spent playing video games or on mobile phones are often blamed for this. Therefore, there is a greater need than ever before for children to spend time at school doing physical education. Furthermore, several studies attest to the fact that doing physical exercise actually improves academic performance. Whereas, for children who are less academically-minded, there should be a chance to explore other types of vocation not linked directly to academia. On the other hand, there is still an enormous need for more labour in the sectors of STEM ( Science, Technology, Engineering and Mathematics) and with the growing world population, society is becoming more competitive as a whole, hence the need for good grades and entrance into higher education to find a highly paid job. Others simply argue that it is up to parents to make sure their children have enough exercise, not educational bodies. To sum up, it is undeniabe that sudying core subjects such as mathematics, foreign languages and science, for example, is essential for children to function in today's society. However, we need to give our kids the chance to decide by themselves what they want to do We can't make them become scintists or sportspeople if they don't want to, but we can help them to moderate their time to stay healthy and still be well-educated. I personally believe a balance must be struck in the curriculum and physical education must have a place in children's school life.
There are
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opinions about
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education
all around the world. This can be
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explained
by differences in traditions, culture and country
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needs
.
Indeed
,
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many
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people
claim that the balance between academic classes and
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physical
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education
can never be the same.

Nowadays, obesity is on the rise and studies affirm that
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children
are up to 40 per cent less active than they were twenty years ago. Lack of safe places for
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children
to play outside and too much time spent playing video games or on mobile phones are
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often
blamed for this.
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, there is a greater
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need
than ever
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before
for
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children
to spend time at school doing
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physical
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education
.
Furthermore
, several studies attest to the fact that doing
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physical
exercise actually
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improves
academic performance. Whereas, for
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children
who are less
academically
-minded, there should be a chance to explore other types of vocation not linked
directly
to academia.

On the other hand
, there is
still
an enormous
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need
for more
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labour
in the sectors of STEM
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Science, Technology, Engineering and Mathematics) and with the growing world population, society is becoming more competitive as a whole,
hence
the
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need
for
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good
grades and entrance into higher
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education
to find a
highly
paid job. Others
simply
argue that it is up to parents to
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make
sure their
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children
have
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exercise, not educational bodies.

To sum up, it is
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undeniabe
that
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sudying
core subjects such as mathematics, foreign languages and science,
for example
, is essential for
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children
to function in
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today
's society.
However
, we
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need
to give our kids the chance to decide by themselves what they want to do We can't
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make
them become
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scintists
or sportspeople if they don't want to,
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we can
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help
them to moderate their time to stay healthy and
still
be well-educated. I
personally
believe a balance
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must
be struck
in the curriculum and
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physical
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education
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must
have a place in children's school life.
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IELTS essay Physical education. Yes or No?

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