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personal statement for admission in university of saskachuwan. Spending my childhood in the residential colony of Pakistan’s Oldest Fertilizer Plant “Pak-Arab Fertilizers”, as my grand

personal statement for admission in university of saskachuwan. Spending my childhood in the residential colony of Pakistan’s Oldest Fertilizer Plant “Pak-Arab Fertilizers”, as my grand gb8pa
Spending my childhood in the residential colony of Pakistan’s Oldest Fertilizer Plant “Pak-Arab Fertilizers”, as my grandfather used to work there in Workshop Department. Listening to the conversation my grandfather and his colleagues used to have cultivated my interest in science from an early age. My interest and understanding of chemical engineering & its application in industry, developed after my matriculation examination, when my grandfather took me to his workplace for one day. On that day, I visited almost all sections of a fertilizer industry i. e Machinery workshop, Technical Store, Product storage/warehouse and Central control room. The moment I entered central control room of ammonia plant; I was mesmerized to know the fact that all those giant vessels in the field are being controlled by a bunch of people (mostly chemical engineers) sitting in CCR monitoring the various critical parameters at their terminals. It looked to me like a huge cockpit of a commercial flight. That visit triggered me to search more about engineering fields and their industrial scope. A continuous research of next 02 years, made it easy for me to decide chemical engineering as my major for undergraduate studies. I really liked the fact that it involves dealing with huge amount of data and it touches almost every field i. e manufacturing, pharmaceuticals, healthcare, design and construction, pulp and paper, petrochemicals, food processing, business services, biotechnology, and environmental health and safety. I had the good luck to have the opportunity to study at University of the Punjab, which is the oldest, largest and the most prestigious university of Pakistan. Those four years of extensive study and experimentation in the subjects of Heat transfer, Fluid mechanics, Mass Transfer, Mechanical Operations, Process Control, Chemical Reaction Engineering, Energy Management etc. instilled in me the desire to become a researcher. During my undergraduate I have worked on a research report “Production of activated carbon from Pakistan indigenous Coconut shell”. At my final year of bachelor’s degree, I proposed a plant design project titled “Gasification of Municipal Waste”, which was based on the type and amount of waste produced in Lahore (Pakistan’s 2nd largest city). Both theses assignments being sort of my first venture into research work, it greatly enhanced my research ability and broadened my academic vision. After my graduation, I was fortunate enough to get into country's 2nd largest Urea Producing conglomerate, Engro Fertilizers Limited. During my 4. 5 years tenure in the company, as Production engineer on a 2000T/day Urea plant I have worked on multiple projects i. e. Corrosion loss profile of Urea Reactor and carbamate condensers & research on corrosion impact on CO2 stripper under different temperatures. One project that is very close to my heart was reduction of environmental impact of Urea Plant startup. In this assignment I headed a multi-disciplinary team of 05 individuals, that had worked on data gathering, analyzing, and benchmarking different Urea plant technologies. After a thorough research of 04 months, we were able to propose a new startup procedure for the Urea plant that was reviewed and approved by OEM (TOYO Engineering Japan), as a result of modified startup procedure we were able to reduce 68% ammonia vented in atmosphere in each startup and startup success rate increased from 62% to 100%. Working on such projects that involved data management, gathered from multiple instrumentation, and making sense out of it, polished my analytical and problem-solving skills. As a result of such assignments, I was able to certify as Six Sigma Green Belt & Black Belt by American Society of Quality (ASQ), (a data driven certification that mainly involves complex statistics techniques and variations reduction methodologies i. e DOE & ANOVA). Engro Foundation spends around 100 million PKR annually as (CSR) Corporate Social Responsibility, in the spirit of community service, I have been actively involved in organizing committees of multiple initiatives i. e. Sahara School (a school for underprivileged community), Technical Training college (an institute to produce indigenous technical talent) and Pela Qadam (initiative to implant artificial prosthesis). University of Saskatchewan's chemical engineering program looms large in my mind, mostly because of its outstanding faculty and interdisciplinary approach to engineering. In my own quest for a suitable graduate program, I was thrilled to learn that the university was among the top 15 research universities in Canada. In addition, U of S provides an ideal climate for me to develop my cross-disciplinary interests. In particular, the presence of a faculty with a diverse set of background and each specializing in different areas would foster, I hope, fruitful discussion with different professors and help me broaden and enrich my research. I have thoroughly thought about my future, and pursuing master degree is the next big step in my plan. All of my previous achievements and valuable industrial have been carefully prepared to meet my main objective, which is to develop research to solve industrial problems University of Saskatchewan's chemical engineering program looms large in my mind, mostly because of its outstanding faculty and interdisciplinary approach to engineering. In my own quest for a suitable graduate program, I was thrilled to learn that the university was among the top 15 research universities in Canada. In addition, U of S provides an ideal climate for me to develop my cross-disciplinary interests. In particular, the presence of a faculty with a diverse set of background and each specializing in different areas would foster, I hope, fruitful discussion with different professors and help me broaden and enrich my research. I am expecting to put my knowledge into use and make the most of my potential in real life. This helped me to develop time management, problem-solving and teamwork skills, as we encountered several problems along the way (like choosing the right gasifier type, which scale of plant to be built for profitability etc. ) as well as having to cope with each other for long hours in order to meet deadlines.
Spending my childhood in the residential colony of Pakistan’s Oldest
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Fertilizer
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Plant
“
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Pak-Arab
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, as my grandfather
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used
to work there in Workshop Department. Listening to the conversation my grandfather and his colleagues
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used
to have cultivated my
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interest
in science from an early age. My
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interest
and understanding of
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chemical
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engineering
& its application in industry, developed after my matriculation examination, when my grandfather took me to his workplace for one day. On that day, I visited almost all sections of a
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fertilizer
industry i. e Machinery workshop, Technical Store, Product storage/warehouse and Central control room. The moment I entered central control room of ammonia
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plant
; I
was mesmerized
to know the fact that all those giant vessels in the field are
being controlled
by a bunch of
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people
(
mostly
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chemical
engineers) sitting in CCR monitoring the various critical parameters at their terminals. It looked to me like a huge cockpit of a commercial flight. That visit triggered me to search more about
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engineering
fields and their industrial scope. A continuous
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research
of
next
02 years, made it easy for me to decide
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chemical
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engineering
as my major for undergraduate studies. I
really
liked the fact that it involves dealing with huge amount of
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data
and it touches almost every field i. e manufacturing, pharmaceuticals, healthcare, design and construction, pulp and paper, petrochemicals, food processing, business services, biotechnology, and environmental health and safety.

I had the
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good
luck to have the opportunity to study at
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University
of the Punjab, which is the oldest, largest and the most prestigious
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university
of Pakistan. Those four years of extensive study and experimentation in the subjects of Heat transfer, Fluid mechanics, Mass Transfer, Mechanical Operations, Process Control,
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Chemical
Reaction
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Engineering
, Energy Management etc. instilled in me the desire to become a researcher. During my undergraduate I have worked on a
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research
report “Production of activated carbon from Pakistan indigenous Coconut shell”. At my final
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year
of bachelor’s degree, I proposed a
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plant
design
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project
titled “
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Gasification
of Municipal Waste”, which
was based
on the type and amount of waste produced in Lahore (Pakistan’s 2nd largest city). Both
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theses
assignments being sort of my
first
venture into
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research
work, it
greatly
enhanced my
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research
ability and broadened my academic vision.

After my graduation, I was fortunate
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enough
to
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get
into country's 2nd largest Urea Producing conglomerate,
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Engro
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Fertilizers
Limited. During my 4. 5 years tenure in the
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company
, as Production engineer on a 2000T/day Urea
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plant
I have worked on multiple
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projects
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i. e.
Corrosion loss profile of Urea Reactor and
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carbamate
condensers &
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research
on corrosion impact on CO2 stripper under
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different
temperatures. One
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project
that is
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very
close to my heart was reduction of environmental impact of Urea
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Plant
startup. In this assignment I headed a multi-disciplinary team of 05 individuals, that had worked on
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data
gathering, analyzing, and benchmarking
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different
Urea
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plant
technologies. After a thorough
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research
of 04 months, we were able to propose a new startup procedure for the Urea
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plant
that
was reviewed
and approved by OEM (
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TOYO
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Engineering
Japan),
as a result
of modified startup procedure we were able to
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reduce
68% ammonia vented in atmosphere in each startup and startup success rate increased from 62% to 100%. Working on such
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projects
that involved
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data
management, gathered from multiple instrumentation, and making sense out of it, polished my analytical and problem-solving
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skills
.
As a result
of such assignments, I was able to certify as Six Sigma Green Belt & Black Belt by American Society of Quality (ASQ), (a
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data
driven certification that
mainly
involves complex statistics techniques and variations reduction methodologies i. e DOE & ANOVA).
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Engro
Foundation spends around 100 million
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PKR
annually
as (CSR) Corporate Social Responsibility, in the spirit of community service, I have been
actively
involved in organizing committees of multiple initiatives
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i. e.
Sahara School (a school for underprivileged community), Technical Training college (an institute to produce indigenous technical talent) and
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Pela
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Qadam
(initiative to implant artificial prosthesis).

University of Saskatchewan's
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engineering
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program
looms large in my mind,
mostly
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because
of its outstanding faculty and interdisciplinary approach to
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engineering
. In my
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own
quest for a suitable graduate
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program
, I
was thrilled
to learn that the
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university
was among the top 15
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research
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universities
in Canada.
In addition
, U of S provides an ideal climate for me to
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develop
my cross-disciplinary
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interests
.
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In
particular, the presence of a faculty with a diverse set of background and each specializing in
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different
areas would foster, I hope, fruitful discussion with
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different
professors and
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help
me broaden and enrich my research.

I have
thoroughly
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thought
about my future, and pursuing master degree is the
next
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big
step in my plan. All of my previous achievements and valuable industrial have been
carefully
prepared to
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meet
my main objective, which is to
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develop
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research
to solve industrial problems
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University
of Saskatchewan's
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chemical
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engineering
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program
looms large in my mind,
mostly
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because
of its outstanding faculty and interdisciplinary approach to
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engineering
. In my
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own
quest for a suitable graduate
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program
, I
was thrilled
to learn that the
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university
was among the top 15
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research
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universities
in Canada.
In addition
, U of S provides an ideal climate for me to
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develop
my cross-disciplinary
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interests
.
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In
particular, the presence of a faculty with a diverse set of background and each specializing in
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areas would foster, I hope, fruitful discussion with
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different
professors and
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me broaden and enrich my
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. I am expecting to put my knowledge into
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use
and
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make
the most of my potential in real life.

This
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me to
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time management, problem-solving and teamwork
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skills
, as we encountered several problems along the way (like choosing the right
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gasifier
type, which scale of
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to
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for profitability etc.
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as well
as having to cope with each other for long hours in order to
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