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People's views differ over whether it is more beneficial for health to live in a city or in a village. Despite a more comfortable life in cities, I strongly believe that it is easier to remain healthy in the countryside. What makes life in cities attractive for a number of people is a high level of medical assistance. It is not a secret that big cities provide good career opportunities for various specialists, therefore, the best medical personnel prefer to reside there. Moreover, urban hospitals have an access to high-tech equipment due to the fact that the influx of government funding is higher. My home city is a perfect example that illustrates excellently equipped medical centers with top-notch staff. On the other hand, individuals who live in the countryside can enjoy the fresh air and low level of noise. Owing to the fact that the infrastructure is not well developed in villages, there are little amount of cars and public transport, that contributes to the decrease of air pollution. In addition, village dwellers do not face the problem of industrial noise, which is the main reason for stress and psychological diseases according to recent researches. From my perspective, low levels of pollution and industrial noise are crucial for maintaining good health, therefore raising people's happiness. It is a well-known fact that the level of contentment directly correlates with individual well-being. To recapitulate, despite access to better medicine in megapolises, I am convinced that fresh air, as well as a low level of noise, makes a suburban life more advantageous.
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live
in a city or in a village. Despite a more comfortable life in
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cities
, I
strongly
believe that it is easier to remain healthy in the countryside.

What
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life in
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cities
attractive for a number of
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people
is a high
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level
of medical assistance. It is not a secret that
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big
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cities
provide
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good
career opportunities for various specialists,
therefore
, the best medical personnel prefer to reside there.
Moreover
, urban hospitals have
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an access
to high-tech equipment due to the fact that the influx of
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government
funding is higher. My home city is a perfect example that illustrates
excellently
equipped medical centers with top-notch staff.

On the other hand
, individuals who
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live
in the countryside can enjoy the fresh air and low
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level
of
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noise
. Owing to the fact that the infrastructure is not
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well developed
in villages, there are
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little
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amount
of cars and public transport, that contributes to the decrease of air pollution.
In addition
, village dwellers do not face the problem of industrial
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noise
, which is the main reason for
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stress
and psychological diseases according to recent researches.

From my perspective, low
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levels
of pollution and industrial
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noise
are crucial for maintaining
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good
health,
therefore
raising
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people
's happiness.
It is a well-known fact that
the
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level
of contentment
directly
correlates with individual well-being.

To recapitulate, despite access to better medicine in
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megapolises
, I
am convinced
that fresh air,
as well
as a low
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level
of
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noise
,
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makes
a suburban life more advantageous.
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IELTS essay People's views differ over whether it is more be

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
259 words
5.5
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