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Cholesterol and heart disease process

Cholesterol and heart disease process 73jon

Cholesterol can be a risk factor of heart disease. This process will show you how cholesterol leads to heart disease. Cholesterol is a fatty substance in our blood stream. First, the first cause is eating unhealthy foods. Since it affects inactive people, you have to exercise. Second, when the fat build up in artery walls, that will cause narrowing of arteries while arteries become stiffening. Then artery walls start to damage. Next, as soon as the blood flow restricted, the heart tissue will weaken because lack of oxygen supply. Meanwhile, it will form of fatty streaks in artery. Then fatty streaks crack. After that a clot will be formed around the crack. Since the heart muscle lack of oxygen, the blood clot becomes blocked. Finally, this will cause a heart attack or stroke. To sum up, you have to eat healthy food and exercise because that will help you avoid the risk of cholesterol.

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