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People’s shopping habits depend more on the age group they belong to than any other factors. Do you agree or disagree? v.7

People’s shopping habits depend more on the age group they belong to than any other factors. v. 7
These days, shopping has become increasing popular among people. Some people argue that shopping preferences of a man's and teenagers tend to buy more than elderly people, a human’s ability to purchase is ultimately determined by their financial status. Rich people tend to buy more than poor people. This is not necessarily because their needs are greater. They buy more because they can afford it. Conversely, poor people cannot afford to purchase frequently because their financial situation does not permit it. Of course, there are some people who borrow money to buy things, but they cannot carry on this habit for long because there is a limit to the amount of credit a human can get. Having said that, the age of a customer may also influence their shopping habits. Impulsive buying, for example, is more common among adolescents and youngsters. They often follow fads and buy things that they may or may not need. They are also more likely to invest in clothing, gadgets and personal care products. Even so, not every youngster spends in the same way. Young people coming from rich family backgrounds certainly spend more than their poor counterparts. Another factor that could influence the shopping habits of people is their values and beliefs. People who believe in simple living are unlikely to splurge even if they can afford it. In conclusion, the financial situation of a man is the first and foremost factor that determines their shopping habits. Age and value systems are also influential factors, but they are not more important than the purchasing power of people.
These days,
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shopping
has become increasing popular among
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people
.
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Some
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people
argue that
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shopping
preferences of a
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man
's and
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teenagers
tend to
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buy
more than elderly
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people
, a human’s ability to
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purchase
is
ultimately
determined by their financial status.

Rich
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people
tend to
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buy
more than poor
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people
. This is not
necessarily
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because
their needs are greater. They
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buy
more
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because
they can afford it.
Conversely
, poor
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people
cannot afford to
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purchase
frequently
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because
their financial situation does not permit it.
Of course
, there are
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some
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people
who borrow money to
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buy
things,
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but
they cannot carry on this
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habit
for long
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because
there is a limit to the amount of credit a human can
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get
.

Having said that, the age of a customer may
also
influence their
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shopping
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habits
. Impulsive buying,
for example
, is more common among adolescents and youngsters. They
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often
follow fads and
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buy
things that they may or may not need. They are
also
more likely to invest in clothing, gadgets and personal care products. Even
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so
, not every youngster spends
in the same way
. Young
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people
coming from rich family backgrounds
certainly
spend more than their poor counterparts.

Another factor that could influence the
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shopping
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habits
of
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people
is their values and beliefs.
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People
who believe in simple living are unlikely to splurge even if they can afford it.

In conclusion
, the financial situation of a
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man
is the
first
and foremost factor that determines their
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shopping
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habits
. Age and value systems are
also
influential factors,
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but
they are not more
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important
than the purchasing power of
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people
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay People’s shopping habits depend more on the age group they belong to than any other factors. v. 7

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
263 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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