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people will go to shopping just for entertaiment in future

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in to day’s world, we are faced with fastly developing technology, the internet is caused that everything is going to so easy; online shopping is one of them as therefore need to go to a shopping mall is caused at least and maybe in the future people will go to shopping just for fun and have a leisure time, at the end of this essay I will say I agree with this topic or not. online shopping is one of the most ways to save your time, in a don't access situation to shopping malls is the best way for buying something that you need it, therefore, it's clear that people are welcoming from using that. for instance, sometimes you can buy online you wanted goods from another city or country that you didn't have accessibility to that or didn't know where you will find it. Regarding the advantages of online shopping, require to go to shopping malls and stores has been less more than past but some people don't trust online shopping and should try or touch everything that will want to buy. in addition someone has a great enjoyment of window shopping and looking for something. In conclusion, I’m sure we will see online shopping is going to more pervasive than now. we rarely will require to go to some places to buying something, then needing to go out will disappear gradually for the mentioned reason. as a result, traditional shopping will become just a hobby and entertainment for people.
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fastly
developing technology, the internet
is caused
that everything is going to
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so
easy;
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online
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shopping
is one of them as
therefore
need to go to a
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shopping
mall
is caused
at least and maybe in the future
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people
will go to
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shopping
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just
for fun and have a leisure time, at the
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end
of this essay I will say I
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agree
with this topic or not.

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online
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shopping
is one of the most ways to save your time, in
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a don
't access situation to
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malls is the best way for buying something that you need it,
therefore
, it's
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that
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people
are welcoming from using that.
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instance,
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you can
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buy
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online
you wanted
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goods
from another city or country that you didn't have accessibility to that or didn't know where you will find it.

Regarding the advantages of
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online
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shopping
, require
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to go
to
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malls and stores has been
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less more
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some
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don't trust
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and should try or touch everything that will want to
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buy
.
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in
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addition
someone has a great enjoyment of window
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and looking for something.

In conclusion
, I’m sure we will
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see
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online
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is going to more pervasive than
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now
.
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we
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to
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some
places to buying something, then needing to go out will disappear
gradually
for the mentioned reason.
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as
a result, traditional
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shopping
will become
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just
a hobby and entertainment for
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people
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IELTS essay people will go to shopping just for entertaiment in future

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
252 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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