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People who cause their own illnesses through unhealthy lifestyles and poor diets should have to pay more for health care. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

People who cause their own illnesses through unhealthy lifestyles and poor diets should have to pay more for health care. with this opinion? PJPg
Morden food habits and improper lifestyle cause the main reason for the outbreak of many new diseases and eventually most of the people resulted in paying to the health care sectors. This essay will discuss in detail about the unhealthy lifestyle and food habits. I strongly agree with the statement. We say “health is wealth” so it is our primary responsibility to take care of our health. But in recent times due to work pressure and laziness, most of them neglect to care about their fitness. This unhealthy habituation will lead to serious consequences over a while. Sometimes, it may cause serious life-threatening illnesses. Eventually, it will put up in spending most of our hard earned money on hospitals. It does not only deal with the matter of money and also makes life miserable. The market survey reports economy of Pharmaceutical industries like Pfizer, Apotex & Sunpharma growth has significantly increased in the last decade. In addition to that, food habit is also considered as a serious cause for the health issues. It has become a fashion to hangout for a party during weekends. Consuming unhealthy food will accumulate cholesterol inside the human system. Traditional foods are slowly getting vanished. People are focussing on western food habits like Pizza & Burgers. In the olden days, the average living period of the people was reported around 80 years, this is possible because of their nature of work & food habits. In conclusion, Lifestyle & food habits need to be considered as an important element of wellbeing. People should give importance to their health by maintaining their fitness desperately and also they should take the balanced nutrition food. This will help them to avoid the expenditure on hospitals and pharmacies.
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and improper lifestyle cause the main reason for the outbreak of
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many
new diseases and
eventually
most of the
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people
resulted in paying to the
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health
care sectors. This essay will discuss in detail about the unhealthy lifestyle and
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food
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habits
. I
strongly
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agree
with the statement.

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“health
is wealth”
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so
it is our primary responsibility to take care of our
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health
.
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But
in recent times due to work pressure and laziness, most of them neglect to care about their fitness. This unhealthy habituation will lead to serious
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consequences over
a while.
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Sometimes
, it may cause serious life-threatening illnesses.
Eventually
, it will put up in spending most of our
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hard earned
money on hospitals. It does not
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only
deal with the matter of money and
also
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makes
life miserable. The market survey reports economy of Pharmaceutical industries like Pfizer,
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Apotex
&
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Sunpharma
growth has
significantly
increased in the last decade.

In addition
to that,
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food
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habit
is
also
considered as a serious cause for the
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health
issues. It has become a fashion
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to hangout
for a party during weekends. Consuming unhealthy
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food
will accumulate cholesterol inside the human system. Traditional
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foods
are
slowly
getting vanished.
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People
are focussing on western
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food
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habits
like Pizza & Burgers. In the olden days, the average living period of the
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people
was reported
around 80 years, this is possible
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because
of their nature of work &
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food
habits.

In conclusion
, Lifestyle &
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food
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habits
need to
be considered
as an
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important
element of
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wellbeing
.
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People
should give importance to their
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health
by maintaining their fitness
desperately
and
also
they should take the balanced nutrition
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food
. This will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
them to avoid the expenditure on hospitals and pharmacies.
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IELTS essay People who cause their own illnesses through unhealthy lifestyles and poor diets should have to pay more for health care. with this opinion?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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