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It is argued that whether some useful subjects should be compulsory to all undergraduates or university students should be allowed to choose the subject which they desire to study.

It is argued that whether some useful subjects should be compulsory to all undergraduates or university students should be allowed to choose the subject which they desire to study. q2qD
It is argued that whether some useful subjects should be compulsory to all undergraduates or university students should be allowed to choose the subject which they desire to study. I do believe that undergraduates are mature enough to decide their study path by selecting what subjects to devote time and effort to. To begin with, it is undeniable that some scientific and technological courses bring plenty of benefits for the students’ future. Those essential subjects equipped students with elementary and vital skills such as computer literature or data processing skill, certainly, these skills play an extremely important part in applying for a high-paying job. Without these fundamental capacities, after graduation, students will find it hard to get a satisfying job and regrettably lose their golden opportunity. On the other hand, most university students are self-conscious of their strengths and limitations, hence, they know what is best and most necessary for them. Therefore, they should be encouraged to select what subject will help them discover more about their potentials and firmly enhance their abilities as well as appropriately preparing for their career path. Personally, I do suppose that students have their right in choosing suitable subjects to study. Different students with distinctive talents and skills will create a diverse and profound society. On the contrary, if universities only focus on teaching students some particular scientific subjects, graduates will be all the same as who they have been trained to be. As a result, there will be no difference as everyone are scientists instead of artists or businessman. In conclusion, I do agree that the university curriculum should include some practical as well as essential subjects to prepare students for a better career, besides, students should be promoted to explore more about themselves by exposing themselves to their desired subjects.
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should be compulsory to all undergraduates or
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university
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students
should be
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allowed
to choose the
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subject
which they desire to study. I do believe that undergraduates are mature
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enough
to decide their study path by selecting what
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subjects
to devote time and effort to.

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begin
with, it is undeniable that
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some
scientific and technological courses bring
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plenty
of benefits for the
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students’
future. Those essential
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subjects
equipped
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students
with elementary and vital
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skills
such as computer literature or data processing
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certainly
, these
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skills
play an
extremely
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part in applying for a high-paying job. Without these fundamental capacities, after graduation,
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students
will find it
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hard
to
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get
a satisfying job and
regrettably
lose their golden opportunity.

On the other hand
, most
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university
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students
are self-conscious of their strengths and limitations,
hence
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be encouraged
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subject
will
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help
them discover more about their potentials and
firmly
enhance their abilities
as well
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appropriately
preparing for their career path.

Personally
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students
have their right in choosing suitable
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subjects
to study.
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Different
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students
with distinctive talents and
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skills
will create a diverse and profound society.
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universities
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particular scientific
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subjects
, graduates will be all the same as
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who
they have
been trained
to be.
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are
scientists
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agree
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university
curriculum should include
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practical
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subjects
to prepare
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students
for a better career,
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,
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students
should
be promoted
to explore more about themselves by exposing themselves to their desired
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subjects
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IELTS essay It is argued that whether some useful subjects should be compulsory to all undergraduates or university students should be allowed to choose the subject which they desire to study.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
298 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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