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people use to stitch their own clothes.

people use to stitch their own clothes. GrN8e
In the past people were skilled enough, they were able to repair their household items and sew their own clothes. But nowadays these skills seems to be disappearing due to variety of reasons. In this essay, I will try to put some light on these issues and the present situation in my country. There are convincing reasons for the shortfall of such skills among the people. Now, people spend more at their workplace and they find it very difficult to do extra work at home. Also, there are many commercial shops and service centers are available to perform such jobs in less time. Due to rapid growth in fashion and design industry people are attracted towards such commercial markets and they forgot to use their own skills. Lifestyle has also been changed and now people are earning more. So, they prefer to buy new products instead of repairing old ones. In my country Pakistan, these skills are vanishing gradually but there is vast majority of people who still possess these skills. In order to save money, some women sew the clothes of their family members and some men tend to do minor repairs at home. However, new generation prefer to get ready-made dresses which are easily available in market. Also, they participate in various entertainment activities like sports and arts. They have little or no interest in stitching their clothes or fixing things. In conclusion, people used to possess variety of skills in the past and now these skills are fading gradually with the passage of time. Major factor which contributes to this matter is busy lifestyle and higher earnings.
In the past
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were skilled
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enough
, they were able to repair their household items and sew their
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own
clothes.
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But
nowadays these
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skills
seems to be disappearing due to variety of reasons. In this essay, I will try to put
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some
light on these issues and the present situation in my country.

There are convincing reasons for the shortfall of such
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skills
among the
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people
.
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Now
,
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people
spend more at their
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workplace and
they find it
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very
difficult to do extra work at home.
Also
, there are
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many
commercial shops and service centers are available to perform such jobs in less time. Due to rapid growth in fashion and design industry
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people
are attracted
towards such commercial
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markets and
they forgot to
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use
their
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own
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skills
. Lifestyle has
also
been
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changed
and
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now
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people
are earning more.
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So
, they prefer to
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buy
new products
instead
of repairing
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old
ones.

In my country Pakistan, these
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skills
are vanishing
gradually
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but
there is
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vast majority of
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people
who
still
possess these
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skills
. In order to save money,
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some
women sew the clothes of their family members and
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some
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men
tend to do minor repairs at home.
However
, new generation prefer to
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get
ready-made dresses which are
easily
available in market.
Also
, they participate in various entertainment activities like sports and arts. They have
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little
or no interest in stitching their clothes or fixing things.

In conclusion
,
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people
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used
to possess variety of
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skills
in the past and
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now
these
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skills
are fading
gradually
with the passage of time. Major factor which contributes to this matter is busy lifestyle and higher earnings.
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IELTS essay people use to stitch their own clothes.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
270 words
5.5
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