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Embrace of the Sea: Your perfect getaway from the hectic of city life

Embrace of the Sea: Your perfect getaway from the hectic of city life XDn5P
How do you spend your long summer vacation? If you don’t have any idea, Embrace of the Sea Summer Camp will surely be your best choice. The Embrace of the Sea Summer Camp is located at Pulau Tioman, Pahang, Malaysia. In this summer camp, there are a fantastic selection of water sports activities waiting for you to explore it. I am sure that you would not regretremorse paying your money to take part in this summer camp as it will not only bring you some blissful memories but also make your holiday more meaningful. Situated beside an endless stretchstretches of white sandy beach which is fringed with rustling coconut trees, there is a spacious campsite prepared with 50 tents. The turquoise blue pristine sea against the azure blue sky allows us to conduct a great deal of watersport activities. In the centre, there is a campfire area where meals are grilled every evening. When I was there, all of us sat around the campfire playing guitars and singing together. Not only that, at night, we all laid on the sandy beach looking up into the sky and saw the star twinkling in the black sky like thousands of fireflies. It was a great time for us as living in the city, we did not get to see these gorgeous blinking fairy lights in the night sky. The breakfasts are simple; mainly sandwiches and breads coupled with a cup of fresh squeezed orange juice to keep us going all day. For lunch, they served us a nutritious yet healthy packed lunch with some fruits and a cup of refreshing coconut milkshake. At night, we had a barbeque party. It was time for us to grill marinated meats, chickens, fresh fishes and seafood. These barbecues were served with a wide variety of salads. Dipping the barbecues in the BBQ sauce, the taste was so superb that I could not stop eating it. In this summer camp, we had the opportunity to try out something new which were the watersport activities. We spent a blissful morning scuba diving in the crystal clear seawater which housed a wide array of sea creatures. Fortunately, we caught sight of the breathtaking coral reefs teeming with colourful tropical fishes. Besides, canoeing was also one of the few activities that we carried out. By canoeing across the blue expanse of the sea, we learned that teamwork is a key for canoeing as coherence is needed. Instead of water sports activities, we also played beach volleyball together to score some friendship points as we needed to work together to decimate the other team. Overall, I wouldn’t recommend this summer camp for those who have hydrophobia but if you are a water sports lover, then this is the camp for you. Book your place now! Don’t miss it!
How do you spend your long
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vacation? If you don’t have any
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, Embrace of the
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Sea
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Camp will
surely
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Sea
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Camp
is located
at
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Pulau
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Tioman
,
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Pahang
, Malaysia. In this
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camp, there are a fantastic selection of water sports
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activities
waiting for you to explore it. I am sure that you would not
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regretremorse
paying your money to
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in this
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camp as it will not
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bring you
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some
blissful memories
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also
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your holiday more meaningful.

Situated beside an endless
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stretchstretches
of white sandy beach which
is fringed
with rustling coconut trees, there is a spacious campsite prepared with 50 tents. The turquoise blue pristine
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sea
against the azure blue sky
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allows
us to conduct a great deal of
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watersport
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activities
. In the
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centre
, there is a campfire area where meals
are grilled
every evening. When I was there, all of us sat around the campfire playing guitars and singing together. Not
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that, at night, we all laid on the sandy beach looking up into the sky and
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the star twinkling in the black sky like thousands of fireflies. It was a great time for us as living in the city, we did not
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get
to
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these gorgeous blinking fairy lights in the night sky.

The breakfasts are simple;
mainly
sandwiches and breads coupled with a cup of fresh squeezed orange juice to
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keep
us going all day. For lunch, they served us a nutritious
yet
healthy packed lunch with
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some
fruits and a cup of refreshing coconut milkshake. At night, we had a
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barbeque
party. It was time for us to grill marinated meats, chickens, fresh fishes and seafood. These
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barbecues
were served
with a wide variety of salads. Dipping the
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barbecues
in the BBQ sauce, the taste was
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so
superb that I could not
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stop
eating it.

In this
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camp, we had the opportunity to try out something new which were the
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watersport
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activities
. We spent a blissful morning scuba diving in the crystal
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clear
seawater which housed a wide array of
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sea
creatures.
Fortunately
, we caught sight of the breathtaking coral reefs teeming with
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colourful
tropical fishes.
Besides
, canoeing was
also
one of the few
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activities
that we carried out. By canoeing across the blue expanse of the
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sea
, we learned that teamwork is a key for canoeing as coherence
is needed
.
Instead
of water sports
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activities
, we
also
played beach volleyball together to score
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some
friendship points as we needed to work together to decimate the other team.

Overall
, I wouldn’t recommend this
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summer
camp for those who have hydrophobia
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but
if you are
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a water
sports lover, then this is the camp for you. Book your place
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now
! Don’t miss it!
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IELTS essay Embrace of the Sea: Your perfect getaway from the hectic of city life

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
468 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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