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People today spend less and less time interacting with other people in their neighborhood and this has a negative impact on communities. What are the possible causes and solutions to this problem? v.1

People today spend less and less time interacting with other people in their neighborhood and this has a negative impact on communities. What are the possible causes and solutions to this problem? v. 1
The communication plays a vital role in an individual’s life. Some intellectuals opine that the verbal communication has a predominant impact that the written communication. I disagree with the above notion and my supporting arguments are discussed further. To begin with, the most crucial advantage of the communication in writing over the verbal is that, it provides the indeed evidence of the convergence. Therefore, the multitude of people is relying on the written communication on a professional level. Thus, the liability of the information will be boosted in this form of information. For instance, most of the organizations are offering, joining letters to their employees in the written contracts instead of verbal conversations. This essential facility motivates the people towards the written communication. Moreover, the verbal communication might get fail to recognise the acceptance of the receiver, nearest the written communication ensures the acceptance of the information by the end user. For example, the job appointment letter informs all the terms and conditions to the candidate and a signature of a candidate ensures that the information provided in the paper is conveyed to him effectively. Furthermore, the spoken communication might get vary due to diversity in a pronunciation, although the written communication does not have such limitation. As a result, this well- developed method of communication has influenced the world at a large extent. To conclude, the communication is an essential tool to enhance the mankind. There are many alternatives to represent the information to the people as well as to the society. Generally, the informal information is imparted using verbal form, but the formal mode of communication would always be in writing.
The
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plays a vital role in an individual’s life.
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Some
intellectuals opine that the
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verbal
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communication
has a predominant impact that the
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written
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communication
. I disagree with the above notion and my supporting arguments
are discussed
further
.

To
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begin
with, the most crucial advantage of the
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communication
in writing over the
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verbal
is that, it provides the
indeed
evidence of the convergence.
Therefore
, the multitude of
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people
is relying on the
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written
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communication
on a professional level.
Thus
, the liability of the
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information
will
be boosted
in this form of
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information
.
For instance
, most of the organizations are offering, joining letters to their employees in the
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written
contracts
instead
of
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verbal
conversations. This essential facility motivates the
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people
towards the
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written
communication.

Moreover
, the
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verbal
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communication
might
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get
fail to
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recognise
the acceptance of the receiver, nearest the
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written
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communication
ensures the acceptance of the
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information
by the
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end
user.
For example
, the job appointment letter informs all the terms and conditions to the candidate and a signature of a candidate ensures that the
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information
provided in the paper
is conveyed
to him
effectively
.
Furthermore
, the spoken
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communication
might
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get
vary due to diversity in a pronunciation, although the
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written
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communication
does not have such limitation.
As a result
, this well- developed method of
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communication
has influenced the world at a large extent.

To conclude
, the
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communication
is an essential tool to enhance the mankind. There are
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many
alternatives to represent the
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information
to the
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people
as well
as to the society.
Generally
, the informal
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information
is imparted
using
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verbal
form,
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but
the formal mode of
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communication
would always be in writing.
16Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay People today spend less and less time interacting with other people in their neighborhood and this has a negative impact on communities. What are the possible causes and solutions to this problem? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
273 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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