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People today generally have better lives than people in the past did. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

People today generally have better lives than people in the past did. v. 2
It is undeniable that the span of life is changing day by day and year by year. Although some people still believe that past days are better, I would argue that the technological advancements and the development of countries are essential factors for making their lives better. To begin with, one of the most critical factors for seeking better lives is technology. The reason behind this is that it has a significant role in making life faster and more convenient than ever before. For instance, people have not been able to send a letter within a couple of seconds as emails do, and they have to wait weeks and sometimes months until it received. In contrast, if this letter included critical information was delayed or even lost, people would get lost and frustrated as well. Moreover, nowadays, the development of countries is essential to obtain a decent lifestyle. Developed countries around the globe always have plans, whether for education, health, transportation and their aim is to see their citizens live in an appropriate life. For example, the Canadian Government had recently established a new way for harvesting crops. Farmers in Canada are suffering from the bad weather almost all of the year that make it impossible for them to grow up the corps, and by this way, the government is still searching for possible solutions to make it easier for their people to live. In contrast, if this has not happened with the Canadian’s authorities, people would struggle in growing their crops. To conclude, this is my view that technology and development are vital factors for making people live in a decent way.
It is undeniable that the span of life is changing day by day and year by year. Although
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believe that past days are better, I would argue that the technological advancements and the development of countries are essential factors for making their
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lives
better.

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with, one of the most critical factors for seeking better
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lives
is technology. The reason behind this is that it has a significant role in making life faster and more convenient than ever
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before
.
For instance
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people
have not been able to
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send
a letter within a couple of seconds as emails do, and they
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have to
wait weeks and
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sometimes
months until it received.
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, if this letter included critical information
was delayed
or even lost,
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people
would
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get
lost and frustrated
as well
.

Moreover
, nowadays, the development of countries is essential to obtain a decent lifestyle.
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Developed countries
around the globe always have plans, whether for education, health, transportation and their aim is to
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see
their citizens
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live
in an appropriate life.
For example
, the Canadian
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Government
had recently established a new way for harvesting crops. Farmers in Canada are suffering from the
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bad
weather almost
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all of the
year that
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make
it impossible for them to grow up the corps, and by this way, the
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government
is
still
searching for possible solutions to
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make
it easier for their
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people
to
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live
.
In contrast
, if this has not happened with the Canadian’s authorities,
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people
would struggle in growing their crops.

To conclude
, this is my view that technology and development are vital factors for making
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people
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live
Consider replacing "in a decent way" with the adverb for "decent"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a decent way
.
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IELTS essay People today generally have better lives than people in the past did. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
273 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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