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People think that the news media has influenced people s lives nowadays and it is a negative development To what extent do you agree or disagree v.2

People think that the news media has influenced people s lives nowadays and it is a negative development v. 2
For many people, news is a regular part o f life. All issue in dispute is whether the massive influence o f ihe news media on people' s daily lives denotes a negative development. It is n> y view that news media does more good than harm to the society. The news media provides people with much o f the information they need on a timely basis, although there are claims that it reports on issues and events purposely ( only selecting those events that interest the audience). Anecdotal evidence shows that people from all walks o f life have the habit of collecting information regularly from the news media, including print, broadcast and Internet-based media. Information assists people in decision making. For example, the Free Trade Agreement reached by the Chinese government and its New Zealand counterpart might open up many opportunities to both counừies. For any business person, either in New Zealand or ill China, failing to recognise and capitalise on this impending change would cause a costly loss. Meanwhile it should be rccognised that the news media can sometimes save lives and reduce casualties. There is a lot o f uncertainty about the surroundings, and people are susceptible to the damage caused by accidents, crimes and natural calamity. The news media conveys the firsthand information to concerned audiences and enable them to take corresponding actions right away. The authority can declare a state o f emergency when it is necessary, organise evacuation and distribute aid to the needy areas. A ll these efforts count on the news media as the messenger. Despite their significant and ongoing contribution to the society, the news media might sometimes be harmixil to society. It is a convention that the news media exaggerates the magnitude of the real threat (for example, the potential o f a terrorism attack), in order to draw the attention o f the desired audiences and in pursuit o f high audience ratings. It ends up with causing panic among the population. Meanwhile, the news media tends to emphasise some issues or events, which virtually have little relevance to people’s daily lives, such as an occasional multiple vehicle accident, an affair that a celebrity is involved with, and the like. It distracts the audience from something that is much more noteworthy, for instance，poverty, environmental problems, to name but a few. In summary, the role o f news media as an information provider should be acknowledged. In case o f emcrgcncy, it acts as a lifcsaver. However, it is not to say that the news media can give people an overall view o f the problems in society all the time.
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news
is a regular part o f life. All issue in dispute is whether the
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massive


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influence
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news
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lives
denotes a
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negative
development. It is
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that


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news
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media
does more
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good
than harm to the society.

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news
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media
provides
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people
with much o f the
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information
they need on a timely basis,

although there are claims that it reports on issues and
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events
purposely
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(
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only
selecting those
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events
that

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interest
the
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audience)
. Anecdotal evidence
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shows
that
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people
from all walks o f life have the habit
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of


collecting
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information
regularly
from the
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news
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media
, including print, broadcast and Internet-based

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media
.
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assists
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people
in
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decision making
.
For example
, the Free Trade Agreement
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reached


by the Chinese
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government
and its
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New
Zealand counterpart might open up
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many
opportunities to both

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counừies
. For any business person, either in
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New
Zealand or ill China, failing to
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recognise
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and


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capitalise
on this impending
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change
would cause a costly loss.

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Meanwhile
it should be
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rccognised
that the
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news
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media
can
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sometimes
save
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lives
and
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reduce


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casualties
. There is a lot o f uncertainty about the surroundings, and
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people
are susceptible to
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the


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damage
caused by accidents, crimes and natural calamity. The
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news
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media
conveys the
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firsthand


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information
to concerned
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audiences
and enable them to take corresponding actions right away. The

authority can declare a state o f emergency when it is necessary,
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organise
evacuation and distribute aid

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to
the needy areas. A ll these efforts count on the
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news
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media
as the messenger.

Despite their significant and ongoing contribution to the society, the
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news
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media
might
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sometimes


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be
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harmixil
to society. It is a convention that the
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news
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media
exaggerates the magnitude of the
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real


threat (
for example
, the potential o f a terrorism attack), in order to draw the attention o f the desired

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audiences
and in pursuit o f high
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audience
ratings. It ends up with causing panic among the population.

Meanwhile, the
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news
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media
tends to
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emphasise
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some
issues or
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events
, which
virtually
have
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relevance to
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people’s
daily
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lives
, such as an occasional multiple vehicle accident, an affair that a

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celebrity
is involved
with, and the like. It distracts the
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audience
from something
that is
much
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more


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noteworthy
, for
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instance，poverty
, environmental problems, to name
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but
a few.

In summary, the role o f
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news
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media
as an
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information
provider should
be acknowledged
. In
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case


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o
f
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emcrgcncy
, it acts as a
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lifcsaver
.
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, it is not to say that the
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can give
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people
an

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overall
view o f the problems in society all the time.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
42Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
41Mistakes

IELTS essay People think that the news media has influenced people s lives nowadays and it is a negative development v. 2

Essay
  American English
28 paragraphs
442 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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