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People should plan for their retirement by saving money. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

People should plan for their retirement by saving money. GN0VL

In each year, the plethora of breadwinners retire from their job. However, retirement is the time, where retired employers are told to have a rest, hence they no longer can earn, and in that moment of time, pension works, which is further going to explain that why do employers should plan their savings before their retirement. Aforementioned about that the defination of the retirement is that the employer is now free from their duties and now they can enjoy their leisure time with their families and friend, but in this case they no longer have right to work further for earning more income, due to that reason it is said to start planning before getting retired. Additionally, higher they save, more they could enjoy their old age life because the primary benefits of prior planning can be beneficial in creating more saving, where after the retirement, that person will able to achieve his dreams, for instance, travelling in abroad. Also, in case if that person is hospitalized, then atleast his savings will prove productive at that moment of time, if need it in urgent. In conclusion, once planning in the earlier stage of retirement can be advantageous, where person will not face the issue aforesaid about the healthcare, then can achieve the dream he wants and hence the savings always aid at the time of emergency, but similarly, in neglecting, it can cost heavily. Therefore, start saving and increase your pension before the retirement.

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